Hey! I need feedback for my personal statement. Thanks in advance. My major - international relations
In 6th grade, my teacher asked a simple question: "Who do you want to be when you grow up?". I was confused because I had never considered this before. I was lost, so I echoed my classmates and said, "a businessman".
Years passed, and I completely forgot about this situation. I broadened my vision of the world and started asking myself the same question that a teacher had asked me a while ago. My journey of self-discovery had just begun. My father is a builder, and my mother is a tailor, and I was certain that I didn't want to follow in their footsteps. My passions were History and English. I also had a talent for finding compromises, and I felt drawn to resolving conflicts and contributing to society. Maybe it's because my name, Nurdoolot, was given by a governor who was aware of the fragmented state of the Sayaks, and he immediately decided to unite all the Sayak clans into one. To this end, he sent messengers to all the Sayak clan leaders, who, feeling scattered and isolated, were already inclined toward the idea of uniting around a strong leader. In this regard, Nurdooolot's call only strengthened their desire for unity. Almost all of them eagerly supported Nurdooolot's initiative. In our Kyrgyz traditions, a name holds sacred significance, meaning that the bearer of the name is expected to embody the qualities the name values. Learning the history behind my name planted in me a sense of purpose.
I began seeking opportunities to become closer to my goal of becoming a diplomat or government advisor. My first responsibility was as a Discord administrator on the server with over 100,000 participants. Of course, becoming an administrator requires perseverance, commitment, and conflict resolution skills. I started as a staff worker whose main job was just to register games (the server was dedicated to a video game). After a month of working, I was promoted to a moderator. The moderator has to monitor the chat and discipline those who disobey the rules, or find compromises and settle disputes. I was good at it and I liked my role, so a short time after, I got a promotion to administrator. This role required more time, professionalism, and commitment, as I also began processing players' reports and suggestions, in addition to my moderation responsibilities. Moreover, I was in charge of the staff and some of the moderators. I had to teach them and punish them. It was sometimes hard to punish them, but it was necessary. This role gave me my first glimpse of my work, an example of diplomacy and leadership; I enjoyed it, and I worked for 10 months. This role was crucial for me in understanding who I want to be and identifying my weaknesses.
Even though I liked it, I realized that I lacked mental strength, which led me to delve into self-analysis. I found that I tend to be afraid of taking initiatives and responsibility. To overcome this, I began participating in various events as an actor or speaker, and also became a volunteer. However, this was not enough, and I started to do sports. Although sports were unfamiliar and intimidating to me, I was determined to challenge myself and grow. This sparked my long-term passion for taekwondo. I came as a newbie who was scared even to punch, but I was constantly training despite everything. My trainer gave one piece of advice that changed my whole vision. She said, "Even world-class winners have fear before every performance, so it's okay to feel fear, you just have to embrace it". This phrase motivated me and showed the realities of life. Eventually, I started winning regional tournaments, and after 2 years, I got my red belt, and I'm on my way to getting a black belt. I started to become the person I've dreamed of, less afraid and more confident, and more resilient. Also, taekwondo first introduced me to Korean culture, because in order to get a new belt. To understand the origins of taekwondo, it is essential to learn about Korea.
My deeper exposure came from studying the Korean language, which was part of our school curriculum. I wasn't paying enough attention to this subject, and I regret not taking it seriously. Believing it irrelevant to my future, I regretfully neglected the opportunity to learn it. But everything changed when, in History class, we studied Korean modern history. I was excited because the history of Korea represented my path. After the 1950s, despite severe economic hardships, it's now one of the leading countries. Korea's path from weak to strong country, and my transformation from unconfident to decisive person, indicate strong policy and diplomacy, which strongly aligns with my vision. I'm eager to engage with Korean culture and hope to share aspects of my tradition in return.
I see the GKS program as a unique opportunity to grow and pursue my aspirations through new challenges. This is a vital step in my decision to immerse myself in a country whose values and history inspire me. I recognize the importance of high-quality education for my bright future, and that's why I am seeking it in Korea. I believe Korea will provide me with insights into diplomacy and international politics. Through the GKS program, I don't just hope to study - I hope to evolve. Korea's values and progress mirror my journey, and I am ready to embrace the next chapter of it there.
In 6th grade, my teacher asked a simple question: "Who do you want to be when you grow up?". I was confused because I had never considered this before. I was lost, so I echoed my classmates and said, "a businessman".
Years passed, and I completely forgot about this situation. I broadened my vision of the world and started asking myself the same question that a teacher had asked me a while ago. My journey of self-discovery had just begun. My father is a builder, and my mother is a tailor, and I was certain that I didn't want to follow in their footsteps. My passions were History and English. I also had a talent for finding compromises, and I felt drawn to resolving conflicts and contributing to society. Maybe it's because my name, Nurdoolot, was given by a governor who was aware of the fragmented state of the Sayaks, and he immediately decided to unite all the Sayak clans into one. To this end, he sent messengers to all the Sayak clan leaders, who, feeling scattered and isolated, were already inclined toward the idea of uniting around a strong leader. In this regard, Nurdooolot's call only strengthened their desire for unity. Almost all of them eagerly supported Nurdooolot's initiative. In our Kyrgyz traditions, a name holds sacred significance, meaning that the bearer of the name is expected to embody the qualities the name values. Learning the history behind my name planted in me a sense of purpose.
I began seeking opportunities to become closer to my goal of becoming a diplomat or government advisor. My first responsibility was as a Discord administrator on the server with over 100,000 participants. Of course, becoming an administrator requires perseverance, commitment, and conflict resolution skills. I started as a staff worker whose main job was just to register games (the server was dedicated to a video game). After a month of working, I was promoted to a moderator. The moderator has to monitor the chat and discipline those who disobey the rules, or find compromises and settle disputes. I was good at it and I liked my role, so a short time after, I got a promotion to administrator. This role required more time, professionalism, and commitment, as I also began processing players' reports and suggestions, in addition to my moderation responsibilities. Moreover, I was in charge of the staff and some of the moderators. I had to teach them and punish them. It was sometimes hard to punish them, but it was necessary. This role gave me my first glimpse of my work, an example of diplomacy and leadership; I enjoyed it, and I worked for 10 months. This role was crucial for me in understanding who I want to be and identifying my weaknesses.
Even though I liked it, I realized that I lacked mental strength, which led me to delve into self-analysis. I found that I tend to be afraid of taking initiatives and responsibility. To overcome this, I began participating in various events as an actor or speaker, and also became a volunteer. However, this was not enough, and I started to do sports. Although sports were unfamiliar and intimidating to me, I was determined to challenge myself and grow. This sparked my long-term passion for taekwondo. I came as a newbie who was scared even to punch, but I was constantly training despite everything. My trainer gave one piece of advice that changed my whole vision. She said, "Even world-class winners have fear before every performance, so it's okay to feel fear, you just have to embrace it". This phrase motivated me and showed the realities of life. Eventually, I started winning regional tournaments, and after 2 years, I got my red belt, and I'm on my way to getting a black belt. I started to become the person I've dreamed of, less afraid and more confident, and more resilient. Also, taekwondo first introduced me to Korean culture, because in order to get a new belt. To understand the origins of taekwondo, it is essential to learn about Korea.
My deeper exposure came from studying the Korean language, which was part of our school curriculum. I wasn't paying enough attention to this subject, and I regret not taking it seriously. Believing it irrelevant to my future, I regretfully neglected the opportunity to learn it. But everything changed when, in History class, we studied Korean modern history. I was excited because the history of Korea represented my path. After the 1950s, despite severe economic hardships, it's now one of the leading countries. Korea's path from weak to strong country, and my transformation from unconfident to decisive person, indicate strong policy and diplomacy, which strongly aligns with my vision. I'm eager to engage with Korean culture and hope to share aspects of my tradition in return.
I see the GKS program as a unique opportunity to grow and pursue my aspirations through new challenges. This is a vital step in my decision to immerse myself in a country whose values and history inspire me. I recognize the importance of high-quality education for my bright future, and that's why I am seeking it in Korea. I believe Korea will provide me with insights into diplomacy and international politics. Through the GKS program, I don't just hope to study - I hope to evolve. Korea's values and progress mirror my journey, and I am ready to embrace the next chapter of it there.
