Georgia Southern U; How Engineering degree helps me accomplish my academic goals

Full question: In 250 words or less, describe how an engineering degree from Georgia Southern University will help you accomplish your academic and career goals?
This is just a short answer question. So, give me some feedback please.

I am very proud to be one of the incoming freshmen of Georgia Southern University. From what I was told, I know that the engineering department will apply for accreditation in the Summer of 2013, meaning that the program will be very competitive in the future. Moreover, the Georgia Southern Co-Op program has existed for 20 years, primarily for engineering students. It was recognized as a National Accredited Cooperative Education Program by ACCE in 2001. The Mechanical Engineering areas at GSU includes mechanical design and analysis, material science and manufacturing processing, thermal-fluid-energy sciences, computer aided engineering graphics and analysis, and electron-mechanical devices and controls with an emphasis in mechatronics. So, I would be very confident being in Georgia Southern. I will have the qualifications to enter graduate school, or directly enter careers in plenty of areas.

Be more specific as to what career goal their engineering program would help you in and focus more on your goals not their program so much.

Aniece

I'm kind of stuck here. I don't know what to write next :(...any suggestion??

I am very proud to be one of the incoming freshmen of Georgia Southern University. Becoming an mechanical engineer is my academic goal I wish to achieve. From what I was told, I know that the engineering department will apply for accreditation in the Summer of 2013, meaning that the program will be very competitive in the future. Moreover, the Georgia Southern Co-Op program has existed for 20 years, primarily for engineering students. It was recognized as a National Accredited Cooperative Education Program by ACCE in 2001. The Mechanical Engineering areas at GSU includes mechanical design and analysis, material science and manufacturing processing, thermal-fluid-energy sciences, computer aided engineering graphics and analysis, and electron-mechanical devices and controls with an emphasis in mechatronics. So, I would be very confident being in Georgia Southern. I will have the qualifications to enter graduate school, or directly enter careers in plenty of areas.

any help, please? :(..it's due tomorrow :(...thanks

Since you have a word constraint for his question, I feel you need to have every word and line supporting you to convince them that you are the right candidate. In that sense, I guess this line does not contribute much for your case.


Aniece is right... I too feel that you need to specifically say what your short and long term goals. Then highlight specific features of uni and show how they can help you achieve these goals. In other words, you talk about uni's features but do not talk about how they help you achieve goals. First identify your goals and tell them, both short and long. Then align the university's features with your goals.

Good Luck!