Good Manufacturing Practice - ENDEAVOUR SCHOLARSHIP

Hi ! I am applying to an Endeavour Scholarship - Australia. I really need some feedback about the following text. Can you please help me, I really appreciate it. Thank you so so much.

drug manufacturing quality

Good Manufacturing Practice (GMP) is an international standard covering a set of regulations for manufacturing operations that a pharmaceutical company has to follow to assure that the drugs are of high quality and do not pose any risks to the patients or public. To keep up with the growth pace of the industry of pharmaceutics, University Technology Sydney (UTS) has delivered a coursework - Master of GMP - which primarily focuses on the up-to-date understandings of legislation relating to the registration, manufacture, storage and delivery of licensed therapeutic goods, as well as how to become an outstanding administrator in quality assurance, risk management and quality control within the industry of pharmaceutical organizations.

Being a Quality Assurance Analyst of a pharmaceutical company, I am thoroughly conscious of the importance of elements and obligations for manufacturers to implement or maintain GMP compliance. Despite 25 years of experience in medicine manufacturing, my current employer still has challenges in quality management system such as computerized documentation, antimicrobial cross-contamination control, sanitation for premises, and other operation-related issues. Therefore, I nurture a strong desire that I manage to solve GMP-based problems which prevents us from entering U.S.A and Australia market where PIC/S-GMP and US.FDA-GMP - higher standards than WHO-GMP - are required. After completion of the course, I will be able to optimize the GMP compliance in pharmaceutical manufacturing environment systematically and professionally according to strict requirements provided by the regulatory authorities in various regions such as TGA-Australia (Therapeutic Goods Administration), FDA-USA (Food and Drug Administration) and EMA-Europe (European Medical Agency).

In UTS, students will have opportunities to take two internships for two research projects at SeerPharma- an Asia-Pacific's Leader in Quality Assurance and GMP solutions. This makes this programme more practice-based and helps students develop their career paths in drug manufacturing industry.

@JacksonLe you have managed to present some pretty convincing information in this essay. However, you spent so much time introducing the course of study and the problems of your company that you were no longer able to properly introduce and represent the proposed dates and locations of your internship or fieldwork. That is an important part of your application process as it is specifically mentioned in the instructions. Therefore, you need to revise the content of your essay in order to free up the word count that will allow you to discuss your internship / apprenticeship schedule after or during your academic training. Try to combine the explanation of your proposed course with the reasons that you have for enrolling in the degree. Explain the problems that your company faces by integrating it into the opening statement. That way you can save on the word count. The scholarship committee needs to see your commitment to the complete masters degree training process by having you indicate the pharma companies in Australia that have impressed you and whose QA standards will definitely help you go back to your home country with usable knowledge and training that you can transfer to or share with your co-employees.

Thank you so much, I will fix my assay as per your advice. Can you please wait a few more minutes, i will post my answer of the second question ?

I do hope you can give me feedbacks on my following answers. They are really valuable to me. Please start a new thread.