I have grown up with a great passion for learning foreign languages - self-introduction letter; KGSP

hello everyone!!
I have written a letter of self-introduction to apply for KGSP. Please correct it for me :) thank you in advance :)

amazed by the Korean culture

Hello! My name is Amel, which means hope, I am 21 years old from ***, I was born and raised in a city called*** exactly in ***. I have grown up with a great passion for learning foreign languages. I started first learning French, since it was one of my school subjects, and then moved to learning English after I have fallen for it, and then I decided to subscribe at a private school of English at the age of 17, where I learned more about the English language and had the chance to find the suitable accent for me, which is the British one, and though it is not a 100% British, my teachers always say that they like my accent and that I keep improving. Among the things that I have learned was overcoming my fear of facing public after I have done a lot of presentations, monologues, debates and plays in front of hundreds of people, the thing that helped me to be more confident about myself and anything I do.

Studying at that school made me choose without any hesitation to study English at university. So, when I endured my studies at university, I have got to know deeper knowledge about the English language such as: the culture, history and of course its literature, how it started and developed overtime and got to know the great novelists, writers and poets that appeared through history. During my literature classes, I have done plenty of analytical reports and presentations about different literary works, which made me love literature, and enjoy reading novels and analyzing them, and that created inside of the love for reading, that's why I want to study it in my masters in order to expend my knowledge about it.

Last year, I started giving extra courses to kids in English during weekends. I really enjoy teaching them; they are so sweet and adorable. What I love about teaching them is their excitement and desire to learn new things. I like when I get them involved in different activities, because they always surprise me with their creativity.

About five years ago, I have been attracted by the Korean culture after I have met a Korean friend on social media, where I was amazed by the Korean culture, she told me about a lot of things that made me want to go to Korean. I was amazed by the Korean different varieties of food, customs and also the values that they appreciate a lot. It is great how Koreans treat each other with respect and how they appreciate loyalty, duty and more importantly, family.

Among the things that captured my attention also was the language. It was something new for me, with different characters, sentence structure and different grammar patterns, so I thought it would be challenging to learn this language. Eventually, I started learning Korean, but I stopped due to my studies; however, I started learning Korean again last summer using a very good website called: talktomeinkorean, where i reached level 6. After that, I started talking to some Korean friends in Korean via "hello talk" application, and I even started writing diaries in Korean and give it to natives it correct it for me, but I think I still in a very beginning level.

A month ago, I found out about this scholarship (Korean Government Scholarship Program) so I thought it would be my golden chance to achieve my dreams, and to finally be able to see all the beautiful things in Korea that I have always seen behind the screens only, and also to be able to learn Korean with real teachers who would guide me directly to learn more effectively and to improve my Korean. Just applying to this scholarship has made me dream about a lot of things, hopefully these dreams one day will come true.

Amel, are you applying for the KGSP straight out of college? You do not mention any work experience in the essay. The work experience is a highly important part of the self introduction because it shows that you have a relevant professional background that has prepared you for the demanding rudiments of the course. Not to mention, it offers an insight into the real world application of your masters degree upon completion. All of the applicants to the program have a tremendous amount of notable professional experience to present to the reviewer. If you don't have any related professional experience, you may lose your chance for consideration.

I noticed that this essay is just a mixture of the different essays that you have been working on for your other applications. I have to tell you right now that by doing so, you are assuring yourself of not getting considered for the scholarship first round of applicants. That is because you do not properly address the necessary requirements of the KGSP scholarship. It is almost as if you just heard about the scholarship then did not even bother to find out if you can truly qualify for the program or not. The base requirements for the self introduction letter, which you failed to present are as follows:

- your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
- education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
- motivations for applying for this program
- reason for study in that country

I do not read any real motivation for you to apply for this program based upon your educational background. You do not even have any pertinent professional experience that could convince the reviewer that you deserve to get past the first round of considerations The way you introduce yourself right now is weak. Based upon the required elements of the self introduction, you do not really present any information pertinent to the application.

Your reason for study in the country and motivations for applying to the program are not original in content or presentation. You should connect the self study part to the one year Hangul training that all scholarship grantees must pass through along with taking the qualifying TOPIK exam. Just say that you are doing some self preparations language-wise in order to ensure that you will not have a hard time during the one year Hangul training and that you will pass the TOPIK exam during your first try.

You need to work on an original self introduction letter. You cannot take bits and pieces of your other applications and hope that you can sew it together to work for this one. The KGSP grant is one of the most difficult grants a student can qualify for. So you have to apply yourself, do your best, and try to distance yourself from your previous application essays if you are even to stand a chance for consideration for this scholarship. The current essay is so irrelevant that it will not make an impression on the reviewer.

@Holt
I'm supposed to graduate this august, that's why I don't have a work experience other than that of teaching some kids on weekends .

I will try to write a new one and I will post it here later on :) thank you :)

You have a problem then if you are graduating in August. It is too soon for you to apply to this scholarship because you will be up against some of the most professionally qualified applicants. Since you don't have any professional experience to speak of, you will definitely lose major consideration points. The only way I can think of to get around the professional experience requirement would be to offer information on any relevant internships and training that you may have had as a student. Do not use the tutoring experience. That will not be considered a real qualification on your part. If you have any sort of professional training while a student, then mention that in the application. We might be able to make it suit your needs for the professional background.

@Holt
Last year, I have been chosen along with other 11 girls to have a special teaching trainning, and during this trainning, we have done a lot of workshops related to teaching. They also gave us the responsibility to organize a camp and each of us (12 girls) had had a group of students where we guided them during the trips and have done to them some different lessons. So what do you think of this!??