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I am an imperfect person that is striking for changes and improvements. UGRAD essay.



Jane007 1 / 1  
Dec 30, 2017   #1
Please kindly give comment and feedback!!!

Why would you be a great participant in the Global UGRAD Program?

my determination in achieving anything in my life



I might not be a great participant in the Global UGRAD Program but there are significant things that I need to learn and gain from joining this program. I am not from a perfect background but I am an imperfect person that is striking for changes and improvements. After have heard from alumni and have looked up for the information about this program, I told myself that I have to do something different in order to be part of this program which will allow me to get out of the box and the pressure that I am currently staying in. The environment, the repeated activities, and the same failure have almost defeated my determination in achieving anything in my life so I must make sure that I am able to gain consciousness again. Although I have read books that illustrate the way to succeed in this and that, in reality, I have not won any of the competitions I have joined yet. I will not surrender, but I will take some times to excel my skills and shine my life later.

By joining Global UGRAD Program, I expect to develop my soft skills such as communication, public speaking, entrepreneurship, and especially leadership. I admit that I am not yet a great participant but I am a person who is seeking for self-development and I am an open-mined, adventurous, persistence, and goal oriented person. I have been joining many volunteer programs because I believe that doing so will help me in advancing my social life as well as helping my community. I used to be a member of AIESEC Cambodia which role was to help sending people to volunteer and exchange abroad. I usually involve with social activities such as organizing event, teaching children English, cleaning up the city, doing charity so on and so forth. I find myself happy to do those things which I priority than my studying. During those involvements, I have met many people who have the same goal, which is to enhance own skills and help people. I love sharing things about school life, personal achievement, or even teen struggles with them. Besides meeting people with the same purpose, I also used to work with people who have unfamiliar backgrounds and perspectives. It is challenging at first but it is a good experience later on. Because I like to hear from their different ideas and how we say no to the ideas but not individual, I understand that in life there are things that we have to accept and decline. Moreover, I remember how I overcame my family disapprove of my going to join conference in Indonesia. Because of my adventurous characteristic, I dare them to recognize my safety in going there alone as well as the idea of girl cannot take care of herself. At last, I could show my parent that I really did it. Once is not enough for my curiosity in trying new thing, I keep applying for scholarship, waiting for my day, and believing in working hard.

With the social experiences I possess and my commitment in joining the program, I believe that I will be able to share with and learn from other participants. I will also be able to take something back for the sake of my self-improvement and my community as a whole.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Dec 30, 2017   #2
Jane, just as I tell the applicants to this program not to brag and be too overconfident in their presentation, I also tell them not to downplay their skills to the point where you offer a self deprecating attitude. If you know you do not qualify and you are not the best candidate, then why are you wasting your time and the time of the reviewer by applying to a program you know you cannot succeed in? Are you kidding? Do you really think that by saying negative things about yourself, the reviewer will give you the scholarship? On the contrary, right after reading the first sentence, he is going to trash this essay and place you in the reject pile. If you do not believe in yourself, then who do you expect to believe in you? Other people will not believe in you because they don't you. That is what the reviewer will be saying when he rejects your application. Why don't you just focus on what you are good at instead as reflected in the second half of the essay. Focus on your being a participant in the AIESEC Cambodia chapter and how you promoted cultural relations, friendship, and an understanding of various situations, cultures, and traditions during that time? That information could help enlighten the reviewer about what you have to offer the program before you speak of what you expect to gain from the program.
OP Jane007 1 / 1  
Dec 30, 2017   #3
Thank @Holt, I will try to revise the introduction part and add more info about my AIESEC experience. Would you mind give me another comment for conclusion?
thienkim_14 1 / 3  
Dec 31, 2017   #4
I am not from a perfect background but I am an ... => I think by this way, your statement will sound stronger


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