Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.
Integrity and resilience are a few values I hold most dear. I strongly believe that these values are not only a vital part of a person's character but also the key to success in the future.
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Integrity and resilience are a few values I hold most dear. I strongly believe that these values are not only a vital part of a person's character but also the key to success in the future. (If I were you, I would open the essay with a more general statement and then I narrow it down to the values which are important to me)
Having integrity would mean to be honest and truthful to everyone and it is of paramount importance to mebecause trust can only be earned through being faithful and truthful(I deleted the second part of the sentence cause it did not add anything to the sentence, it was repeating what you said at the beginning of the sentence. Avoid any redundancy) . Dishonesty can shatter trust between people and destroy a person's future. Therefore, with this belief, I did not hesitate to request for correction of marks when I found out that I was given extra marks for one of the Math exams in JC. I believe that character is far more important than grades as it is the character that shapes one's future(I think you should use the past tense here as you are still talking about somethings happened in the past) .
(In this example you introduced yourself as an honest person, but you have not said how it can help you build a better future.)
Resilience is another value that I hold strongly(If I were you I would reword this, as these words have been used in the prompt) to and I believe that it can be a determining factor to one's success. Life is not always smooth-sailing and problems and difficulties are all part and parcel of life. Therefore, we should recognise that giving up would not be of any help when we are faced with challenges in life. I think that resilience is well demonstrated through my CCA. I was a member of the Chinese Chess Club in secondary school and I always performed poorly in competitions. However, I never considered the choice of giving up but instead, I always give my best in competitions and learn from mistakes. My efforts finally paid off when I won many competitions in Secondary Four.
Elvis Presley once said that "Values are like fingerprints. Nobody's are the same, but you leave 'em all over everything you do" Therefore, it is important to possess good values as I always believe that values shape our future (the quot from Elvis is really good, but I think it would be better to move it to the introduction section and use it as an opening statement. This paragraph is supposed to be a conclusion, so summarize what you stated above and close the essay using a clincher) .
Hope this helps,
Cheers,
Ahmad
