Hi guys
I'm applying to NTU, and i need to submit an essay along with my scholarship application. This is what i have written. Currently, its over 400 words long and i need to shorten it to 300 words. Please help me remove irrelevant parts and help me sort out any grammatical mistakes.
Thanks!
PS: This is really important, as I need to submit this by today!!!! :(
Q. Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.
A.
I know I'm not perfect. But, I believe the best way to work towards perfection is to take advice from those who've already achieved what you're undertaking. Therefore, I love to talk to my elders, my friends, my seniors to know what to do and what to avoid when going about a particular business. Advice steers me clear of potential obstacles and motivates me towards my goals. In fact, this is how I found out about NTU: dissatisfied with my present course, I heard about it while talking to a friend about what other places I could go to. In the same way, I make it a point to advise my juniors and friends about how they can avoid the mistakes that I've committed.
Honesty is something that I value above all else. For me, the means are more important than the end. While I strive to be the best, I would never resort to unfair means to achieve success. For example, once in class 10, while going through my answer scripts, I found that my teacher had inadvertently awarded me extra marks in some questions in my Science paper. I immediately went to my teacher and had the extra marks deducted.
Whether good or bad, I believe in taking responsibility for my actions. After all, once I've done the deed, why should I fear the result? As school Vice Head Boy in class 11 and eventually Head Boy in class 12, I have a proven track record where I have accomplished all that was assigned to me.
I have often gone the extra mile in helping out my friends. Once, in class 11, a friend of mine scored quite badly in a Chemistry unit test. I took it upon myself to make him better in the subject. The result: he passed the end term exam with flying colours!
I think I am deserving of a scholarship at NTU as I know I am capable of living up to everything the will be expected of me and do much more to make the University proud.
I'm applying to NTU, and i need to submit an essay along with my scholarship application. This is what i have written. Currently, its over 400 words long and i need to shorten it to 300 words. Please help me remove irrelevant parts and help me sort out any grammatical mistakes.
Thanks!
PS: This is really important, as I need to submit this by today!!!! :(
Q. Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.
A.
I know I'm not perfect. But, I believe the best way to work towards perfection is to take advice from those who've already achieved what you're undertaking. Therefore, I love to talk to my elders, my friends, my seniors to know what to do and what to avoid when going about a particular business. Advice steers me clear of potential obstacles and motivates me towards my goals. In fact, this is how I found out about NTU: dissatisfied with my present course, I heard about it while talking to a friend about what other places I could go to. In the same way, I make it a point to advise my juniors and friends about how they can avoid the mistakes that I've committed.
Honesty is something that I value above all else. For me, the means are more important than the end. While I strive to be the best, I would never resort to unfair means to achieve success. For example, once in class 10, while going through my answer scripts, I found that my teacher had inadvertently awarded me extra marks in some questions in my Science paper. I immediately went to my teacher and had the extra marks deducted.
Whether good or bad, I believe in taking responsibility for my actions. After all, once I've done the deed, why should I fear the result? As school Vice Head Boy in class 11 and eventually Head Boy in class 12, I have a proven track record where I have accomplished all that was assigned to me.
I have often gone the extra mile in helping out my friends. Once, in class 11, a friend of mine scored quite badly in a Chemistry unit test. I took it upon myself to make him better in the subject. The result: he passed the end term exam with flying colours!
I think I am deserving of a scholarship at NTU as I know I am capable of living up to everything the will be expected of me and do much more to make the University proud.
