Hi All, please take a look at my essay below for Chevening scholarship application. Any feedbacks will be great and much appreciated! :)
Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.
Essay for Chevening Scholarship
Through my freshman years, I was volunteering in an NGO that concerned about youth development. I spend one month in China with 4 other people from different country, spreading our culture. The main event of the program was called Global Village, where I prepared a stand that showcasing Indonesian culture that was represented in some items that I had brought from Indonesia. I also taught a local Indonesian game called Congklak and played the traditional music instrument from bamboo called Angklung. Beside the global village, I also visited local elementary school and kindergarten and gave a short presentation about Indonesian culture. Taking a part in this program, I learned about the importance of sharing our culture to other country. By sharing my own culture and understanding other culture, I had become the global citizen that was open minded and able to collaborate with the people from different background. The next year I was responsible to arrange a similar program on the city where I lived. I believe that the will to make the world a better place and taking part in the movement, even if small it may be, is the prove of a leadership.
Subsequent to my graduation, I worked in a project management field where I was a part of the lead team to the project. The first project I was assigned to was the construction of high rise residential building in Jakarta. One of my responsible as a project engineer was to complete the procurement package in the project. Plenty of items were delayed in the procurement process due to the lack of coordination between the stakeholders. I made a to-do list and point of contact list of every stakeholder and their outstanding tasks, and gave them a follow up email and a call. I set the target date and made sure everyone was working on the same schedule. The package that I was responsible of was completed on time. Subsequently, I was given another packages and basically had to do the same thing as the previous one. However, every package would not be the same and there were some of the package that I could not deliver on time. It was a nice lesson to me and I learned a lot from my experience.
Leadership is an attitude, and whether you are the leader or as the team member, when you identify some risks and you can influence your colleague to resolve the issue is also how you prove your leadership skill. I believe Chevening will be my next platform to prove and sharpen my leadership skill and eventually be an influence to my surroundings.
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Vania, in the first paragraph, your leadership and influencing experience does not come in until you were tasked to set up the same project in your area. Therefore the focus of discussion on this paragraph is wrong. Summarize the first part of the presentation so that you can call a greater focus to your establishing the project in your area. Discuss the obstacles that you had to overcome both within your group an other aspects of mounting the event. Explain how you influeced the outcome through the use of various skills.
Asnthisnessay requires a national or local component to th preswntation, be sure to highlight the national or local importance of this successful event to tie in with the future country leader requirement ofthe prompt. Apply the same considerations to your professional project and the essay should be in a better draft version for final version consideration.