Leadership is People Development

I am applying for the Chevening Scholarship and will appreciate your help reviewing my essays, Thankyou!!!

Chevening is looking for individuals

... who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer. (minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)

People are the best resource a country has, and I am passionate about helping people become better versions of themselves. My love for contributing to human development started in high school. My school is in a rural area where many community kids did not have the resources to go to school. I joined the bridge of care program to raise money for kids in the community to attend school for free. During my holiday, I did menial jobs for various individuals in exchange for money, contributing to the bridge of care program. I did personal campaigns where I was able to convince people to donate to the program. By the time I was graduating, over 200 children previously not in school were enrolled in the community's local primary school. Also, exceptional children who had finished their primary school were given scholarships to attend my high school. I had the privilege to renew hope for kids who had lost hope in school.

In my profession, I have also been able to negotiate a system where new interns are given training in their respective departments before being assigned any project. I worked with Total E&P Nigeria as an undergraduate intern. I was assigned to the Contract and Procurement Department without any prior knowledge of their activities. I gathered the interns in a similar situation, and we made formal complaints to human resources, which the Human Resource Manager rejected. This rejection did not hinder me. I proposed an alternative, a two- or three-day orientation period where the interns are briefed about the department's activities to ensure interns have adequate knowledge about the fundamental activities carried out in their departments and its importance. I was also able to negotiate two days for interdepartmental learning where interns go to their department of interest for two days and spend the rest of the week in their assigned department. All departments implemented this suggestion, and individual departments organized a brief orientation. Subsequently, interns didn't have problems completing tasks assigned to them.

As the first child in my family, I have encouraged my siblings' academic development by holding lessons in math and sciences with them. Along with tutoring, I gave my younger brother the mentoring he needed to realize his dream, which was to have a stellar academic result. Eventually, he had the best grades in his class and even went ahead to do the same for a younger sibling, creating a chain of successes that I inspired. Like John C. Maxwell said, being a leader is not only about creating results; it is also about making people who again go on to produce more leaders and multiply influences.

In conclusion, I have been committed to developing people in my community, and I believe that human development is crucial in assessing the impact a leader has.

Nope. This is not a leadership and influencing essay that focuses on highlighting your current abilities and potential as a leader and influencer. The reviewer does not have any use for your high school reference. In fact, there is nothing in that presentation that shows leadership nor influencing abilities. You have mistaken the Chevening Leadership and Influencing essay for a personal statement, as if you were applying to college. That is your biggest mistake. That is what makes this essay irrelevant and assures that you will not make it past the screening round. Work on a more relevant leadership and influencing essay based on your professional experiences. Discuss work leadership experiences in relation to your potential as a national leader and influencer in the future. Right now, you do not have any impressive information in this essay. The content itself will disqualify you from further consideration.

Since you asked for some help , herewith is my thougths.
Your third sentence, you have be specific about the location of your school.
Again be specific about your profession and your title in that particular profession.