Dear Friends I am applying to chevening and I am now in the application stage. So please help me if you find something can make it better
Chevening is looking for individuals who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.
(minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)
a future leader
Since I believed that leadership is not a position or a title, I started to believe that I am a future leader who can help the community and the world.
One of the most important traits that distinguishes me from others and let me considering myself an effective leader is motivating the team I worked with, at my current job we are a team consists of 13 employee divided into 3 sub teams and a team leader, in our team I always tend to be the motivation agent. I spread the vitality and positive energy every day and especially when dealing with stressful and tension situations. One day I suggested to do the team weekly meeting somewhere out of the office and have fun just to break out the boring routine of normal work days.
Decision making and problem solving have been always a big part of my personality. At the project beginning at my previous job, the contractor site engineer surprised by an error in the structural drawings, I immediately adjusted it after compared it with the non-structural drawings just to make sure my solution doesn't make us fall in another bigger problem. My current job is such a good practice for approaching problems in non-traditional ways which are usually happened at the field visits, and need case by case intellectual solutions. During follow-up visits on the rehabilitation and constructions works, I found out that some works weren't done exactly as in the work agreement, but sometime I accept it after a little adjustment after making sure it met our NGO's standards and regulations. By this step I am saving time and keep the work going well.
I believe that communication is a trait we can't live without, I am a master at the communication skills, I have been always the active and energetic member in the team due to my effective participation in our frequently meetings, sharing new ideas or new work methods that will help us achieving more and better via presentations, and of course passing my messages via emails just to officially document work information.
Efficiency and saving time is also an awesome trait in my personality. One day while I was preparing the special cases report,
I felt that the form of the report has too many duplicate information also its style is hard to easily understand, so I put it as an objective in my work development plan. After I have worked on it for almost 1 month, I share it with my team, when they were glad for this saving time change. Moreover, I always fix any database errors found while working on it, giving a helping hand to all of my team members when they in need and stand beside them when I feel they are going through difficult circumstances.
With Chevening I will become a future leader and my leadership skills will develop through the relations I will build with the most outstanding minds, leaders, influencers and decision makers.
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Haya, I had a sense of disbelief as I was reading your essay because it does not really offer me any information as to your professional background that will make me believe that the narration of events in your essay actually happened. In order to give this essay a semblance of reality, you need to identify the company you are connected with, the department you work in, and the position or title that you held in relation to the scenarios that you presented. By the way, you don't really come across as a leader in the essay. You sound like a very responsible rank and file employee though. Which is good.
However, it is not what the scholarship is looking for. Unless you can improve the essay to show off more complex leadership skills in relation to influencing actions on your part, the essay will not improve. Being a good communicator is a good start, but where does the influencing come in? There is nothing in the essay that proves you have the ability to strongly lead and influence a team.
It does highlight your ability to delegate tasks though. Which should not be confused with leadership nor influencing. By the way, remove the first line that says you do not believe that leadership is vested in a position or title. As a professional, your leadership position is defined by exactly that. Which is why I am starting to think that you are not in a position of true responsibility in your company.
Chevening is very specific about their search for leaders and influencers in various countries. They are all defined by their leadership position and accompanying responsibilities. To belittle that is to say that Chevening is not a good scholarship program because they are not looking for the right kind of leaders. Don't accidentally insult the scholarship foundation. Remove that reference. I am sure you did not mean to say that but it just came out that way.
There is time to improve your essay. Look at the essays presented here in relation to the Chevening scholarship and learn from those presentations. Improve based upon the content of their essays and the advice given to them. Take what advice you can for the improvement of your own paper.
If I am thinking of these possibilities, you can bet that the official assessment officer will see right through your essay as well and dismiss it faster than the time it took me to finish reading and analyzing your essay.