state educational and career goals and the reason for choosing your major
In China, when I was a student in a High School of the Deaf, I had not make the choice of major before I plan to go on my education. Because I can't imagine and touch what like of career and I confused what kind of specialty for me. I heard one of Universities accept deaf people, but only major of the art and deaf people have not any choice. I was unhappy with my job after graduated from the University. After years of experience, my objective turned to another country, and I picked the US because colleges have disability services to support deaf people.
In USA, when I was student at ACC (Austin Community College). I started to search my interesting career. I found two of majors I like and I spent a lot of time to search about major information online. I was initially attracted to chemistry that I watched science information from internet. I took special interest in the bra elastic material is made from petroleum. The elastic fiber is extracted from petroleum, also petroleum extracted many chemical composition to product any material I started to watch video online. The video introduced adoption high technology to make elastic fiber, plastic buckle, etc. At the time, I first took chemistry course. In the lab, I was doing an experiment, the chemical fluid changed to different colors, separate, fuse, etc. I felt amazing with the experiments. For my choice reason I decided to focus on one of majors, which is Chemical Engineering. I would have a motive to deep into the area of chemistry I plan to transfer a university. As an engineer, my objective is to research some problems are difficult to solve that remove the stains is not strong enough with laundry detergent. Also, we consider looking for gasolines substitutes. Based on the world's problem because oil is a finite resource and oil reserves are dwindling. I believe the problems lead us to research and get better possible results to the benefit of the masses.
In studying of experience, I took a lot of time to touch science classes because High School of the Deaf never had science courses. Now I was very clean that I found my right career position. Transfer Texas Tech University and earn a Bachelor's Degree to achieve my goal in my plan. Because there are many the energy and petrochemical industries in Texas and TTU has a good area of studying in chemical engineering. However, I need to earn a great experience with my career in social practice and better to change my life.
Doing so, I will not only change my life about what I can accomplish, but I will also gain valuable training and access to a wider range of possibilities. Ultimately, I would like to share my value experience with other deaf people, especially those in China, so that they, too, realize that deaf people can accomplish just as much as hearing people.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15404 Cao, this essay is not responding to the prompt at all. You wrote a personal statement that does not consider the questions you are being asked to respond to. The first question is "What is your chosen major?" Have you given any thought to that? It really does not sound like you have actually chosen a major yet. You are just throwing ideas in there about how you have suffered so far with regards to your education. Not exactly the best way to choose a major. You instead responded as to why you chose to go to America instead. Which, although connected, doesn't really answer the question. If you haven't chosen a major yet, then you cannot develop a proper response to "What are your educational goals?" If you have no idea what you want to study, then you cannot create an educational goal for yourself. Which means, that you also don't have a definite career goal in mind either. These are the reasons why this essay is not only confusing, but it doesn't make any sense at all to the reader. You need to take a step back, consider the questions in the proper order, then write a new response that better focuses on the questions. Take your time. Don't just write a response without thinking about it. The reviewer will know that you have no clue as to what you want to do in college and your application will most likely be rejected because of it.
@Holt
Thank your suggestion, I will fix the essay again. you mean remove all essay and write new essay? Write what is I doing in College about my education state and goal, right?
Hi Snow_lilac, your English is not very good, so it made your essay pretty difficult to understand. I think you have some good ideas though and have explained why you want to major in chemical engineering. I would not mention that you found two majors that you like, because that is a little confusing. I guess the two majors were chemistry and chemical engineering? In any case, you should really just focus on the one major you chose. The educational goals you want to accomplish seem pretty scattered - inventing better laundry detergents and gasoline substitutes? As someone just entering college, I don't know if you can be expected to have extremely specific goals - maybe stress that chemical engineering is such a vast field that there are many opportunities to help the world, and then you can give these as examples. I think you also need to go into a little more detail about the science courses that have made it clear that you have made the right decision as to your major. Your career goals are also extremely vague - all I see is that you want to work in the petrochemical industry and share your experiences with other deaf people. Try to look forward 10 years and imagine exactly what you would like to be doing. In any case, once you get more specific details in your answer, make sure to get it checked for grammar, because as it is written, there are many errors that I think might remove you from contention.
@TJLuschen
yes, my English is not good. Thank your suggestion. I fixed the essay many times, revised essay is better.