Motivation, small & medium - sized enterprises - GKS Personal Statement Business Administration

Hello! I'm applying to GKS-G this year. Please tell me what do I need to improve in my personal statement! Thanks!

Motivations with which you apply for this program

Global Korea Scholarship is an exceptional opportunity to study in the globally famous institutions that use modern techniques of teaching and get first-hand experience from Korean professors and teaching instructors. I believe that developing small & medium - sized enterprises is the key to a stable economy, just like Korea proves, however, my country lacks a fresh perspective and new approach on how to manage those enterprises. I want to use Korean practices and development strategies in my home country to help it achieve Korea's level of development which will help to improve relationship between countries, and I believe that GKS is the right path to start.

One in a separate thread.

Kindly review the prompt requirements for the GKS-G applicants as provided in your application packet. There are specific instructions for writing the personal statement that you should represent in your response. This first paragraph does not truly aply itself to any of the new personal statement requirements. It would be best for you to delete this paragraph and develop a new response. Consider the writing requirements and address those in your statement. I cannot give you any advice on how to improve your personal statement at the moment because you have not written a complete draft response at this point. I can only help you once I have read your overall response. This piece of writing does not tell me anything I need to know in relation to the required prompt writing instructions. You can post a new thread, do not add to this thread, once you have completed an appropriate draft of your response personal statement. I can give you proper advice then.

Hi! I am also applying for GKS and I want to add some comments to your essay, even if there is only the first paragraph. In my opinion your motivation is not clear and not specific. I think 90% of applycants for Business Administration will write the same things. Insteed find something that can make you special. Try to be more specific, tell the story. You can add example from your background, through which you understand the importance of developing small & medium-sized enterprises. Hope my comment could help you!

Hello, I suggest you to elaborate the more specific area that you are mastered in to show your academic capacity.