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Moving from Mexico to the United States; Academic Challenge Description.



gguzman 1 / 1  
Dec 10, 2013   #1
Describe a recent academic challenge you have faced. Explain how you overcame it.It needs to be 400-600 words. What could I take out, put in, or change?

Moving from Mexico to the United States was not difficult, but adapting to the new and different country has been the most arduous challenge I've faced in my life so far. Leaving all that I had in my country, and reaching out to an unknown place where the culture, biodiversity, language, and specially the education are completely different made me think that it would be hard to get used to it and that I was going to take too long. I felt very fortunate of having enrolled the school where I am studying now because I was well received by kind teachers and classmates. I've never been never alone; I always had the support, company and help of these people who were witness to what I have achieved. Because I entered school two months after it begun, my school counselor told me the day of my enrollment that my credits of the first semester would not be valid, but I could be able to go to school anyways so I could adapt to it and do well in second semester. I thought that whatever I'd do it was going to be in vain, but that was a bad thought of me because nothing is in vain in this life. We always learn and experience everything that is happening to us. I remember the first day that I stepped in front of the school for the first time. I felt excited but with a lot of fear at the same time. My dad is a person of whom I am very proud because he has always been with me supporting me in everything and giving me the best advices. I know that everything he does and says to me is for my own good. I always remember these words when I need strength and motivation to continue "do the best you can and show them what you are capable of accomplish, because I know that you have the ability to achieve every goal you set to yourself. I believe in you and I am sure you can get very far." Since little, I have been a responsible student and I admit it because I know it. I have always been a very calm and quiet person so it is not so easy for me to get distracted in class. I also like to do my duties and get good grades. But still I needed a plus to be able to stand out. I wanted to show my teachers that I was able to achieve any goal and to reach beyond what they were expecting from me. One day at school, they sent me to the office to talk to my counselor and she gave me a new that I never imagined I would receive. Thanks to my grades that had until that time and for the great work and effort that I put on my part, it would no longer be necessary stay one more semester in school because the credits were going to be valid. I have always believed in the things that I am capable of doing, but at the time of achieving them is something incredible. My journey has just started and this was only a little rock that won't stop me to continue. I am aware that things like this will cross my path, but I will always do my best to jump over it.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 11, 2013   #2
Leaving all that I had in my country, and reaching out to an unknown place where the culture,biodiversity, language, and specially the education are completely different made me think that it would be hard to get used to it and that I was going to take too long.

... I think you may have refereed to the demographics by this word (biodiversity) because biodiversity refers to the variety of plant and animal life in a particular habitat that has less impact on your personal or day to day life. The demographics refer to various aspects of people such as age, life-style, ethnicity etc. which has more relevance with this idea (in my opinion).

I felt very fortunate of having enrolled the school where I am studying now because I was well received by kindits teachers and classmates.

I've never been never alone

I never felt alone.

I've never been never alone; I always had the support, company and help of these people who were witness to what I have achieved. Because I entered school two months after it begun, my school counselor told me the day of my enrollment that my credits of the first semester would not be valid, but I could be able to go to school anyways so I could adapt to it and do well in second semester.

Well, you mentioned adapting to new environment was the most arduous challenge... But these lines do not support that idea!
OP gguzman 1 / 1  
Dec 14, 2013   #3
My bad... by "biodiversity" I meant to say "diversity" hope that's more accurate. Thanks so much!
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 6, 2014   #4
Yes.... "diversity" is the right word :)

I've never been never alone; I always had the support, company and help of these people who were witness to what I have achieved.

"never been never alone" means you were alone :D
I have never been alone and always provided with support and encouragement by others.

Because I entered school two months after it begun, my school counselor told me the day of my enrollment that my credits of the first semester would not be valid, but I could be able to go to school anyways so I could adapt to it and do well in second semester.

Write shorter sentences limiting your ideas one per sentence. When you write lengthy sentences you tend to get carried away and the final result is you confuse the reader.


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