Networking Essay for Chevening - Network is a train to success

Hello friends! I want to apply for Chevening scholarship this year and I am in need of a reviewer to my essays. Please kindly help review my essay below and I will surely give my honest opinion to others! Cheers!

Flashing back when I just started working as a commercial analyst about a year and a half ago, I was awfully fragile about the role of my career as it requires a lot of presentation and the art of convincing people to believe in myself. I learned to realise that trusts come with a person rather than the information itself. Being able to be a person who can empower the public could make a complicated task turn into a simple one. Networking skills do not solely imply meeting new people but it gives you a vast source of advanced information, valuable experiences, and interactions between experts once you are included in the group.

In July 2017, I was greatly honored to be one of the speakers at Thailand's largest forum about petrochemical business, The 8th Olefins and Aromatics Forum, held by PTT. The key detail was to portray business challenges which could make relevant impacts to the industry. Asides new acquaintances I obtained, I am now able to access a pool of expertise in economy and geopolitics, upstream business, and downstream business which can truly help broaden and sharpen my analysis. Furthermore, being known as one of the speakers has elevated my confidence to another level when it comes to petrochemical. I can certainly exchange my knowledge to the public without hesitation which totally helps distribute essential information to all party concerned faster. Hence, accelerating the work process by miles. However, it is extremely important not to omit others' opinions especially when constructive criticisms are given.

Likewise, receiving Chevening scholarship can surely open up my world to an invaluable knowledge and experiences from Cheveners of all fields. This will not only expand my skills but it also helps achieve my plan by studying the systems of successful countries from direct citizens. Moreover, I can exchange my knowledge by utilising the network I have in my hometown to other Cheveners in case that our strong points could make betterments to other countries.

Nattawat, I can see from your essay that your network is not as extensive as you make it appear to be. That is why you tried to cover up the fact by trying to draw the attention of the reviewer to other aspects of discussion such as your belief in the importance of networking and how it should be based on confidence an influence rather than the building of useful professional contacts. Since I saw right through to the weakness of your essay, you can bet that the reviewer will see more than what I saw when he reads your essay.

He will know that you do not have the kind of networking that you imply that you have because you only refer to one instance of creating a network and that was when you were a speaker at the convention. If you do not have any other professional networking reference, then this is a networking essay that is not as strong and competitive as it should be. However, it is better than not having any network to speak of. Therefore, this is an acceptable networking discussion. It is not strong nor competitive but it gets the requirements for the scholarship application done.

What your essay has going for it is the fact that I can feel your honest desire to achieve something and return the graciousness of the scholarship foundation if you should be awarded a grant. So maybe, just maybe, this essay can work for your application.

With that said, I would like to add that if you can add at least one or two more work related networking instances, and prove that those networks still work to your professional benefit up till today, then the essay just might get an increased chance for consideration.