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I stumbled across this community when writing a scholarship essay for NTU, and I would like to get advices from anyone on my essay. Please give me feedback tell areas where I can improve upon. Thank you!
Father. The man of the family. The one who places others before him.
My father's childhood has poverty written all over it. Being the youngest in a family of 12 siblings, their main objective was merely to survive, nothing more. My grandfather worked as a rubber tapper, in which the income earned was barely sufficient to raise the family. Everyday, my father would return from school to help out his father in the rubber tapping plantation. As a result, his results were poor.
My childhood, on the other hand, is a complete disparity of what his was. I consider myself extremely privileged to have been part of a well-off family. My family has funded my education and provided me with perpetual support for the last 17 years of my life.
The biggest influence that my father has on me is the fact that he managed to; from poverty, raised a family who is so fortunate. All of this could not be achieved if it wasn't for his determination and vision into the future. This is evident in my daily life; he would wake up as early as 5:30am in the morning to prepare breakfast for me, and through forgoing his sleep, ensure that I am well focused in class. Thanks to him, I do not have to worry about financial struggles, social exclusion and instead can devote all my time and effort into studies.
I believe the dissimilarity that he experienced during his childhood is what makes him full of wisdom today. It is true that people who lack the exposure to particular things in the past are the ones who embrace it the best in the future, such as my father with the jump from poverty to being well-off.
I stumbled across this community when writing a scholarship essay for NTU, and I would like to get advices from anyone on my essay. Please give me feedback tell areas where I can improve upon. Thank you!
Father:
Father. The man of the family. The one who places others before him.
My father's childhood has poverty written all over it. Being the youngest in a family of 12 siblings, their main objective was merely to survive, nothing more. My grandfather worked as a rubber tapper, in which the income earned was barely sufficient to raise the family. Everyday, my father would return from school to help out his father in the rubber tapping plantation. As a result, his results were poor.
My childhood, on the other hand, is a complete disparity of what his was. I consider myself extremely privileged to have been part of a well-off family. My family has funded my education and provided me with perpetual support for the last 17 years of my life.
The biggest influence that my father has on me is the fact that he managed to; from poverty, raised a family who is so fortunate. All of this could not be achieved if it wasn't for his determination and vision into the future. This is evident in my daily life; he would wake up as early as 5:30am in the morning to prepare breakfast for me, and through forgoing his sleep, ensure that I am well focused in class. Thanks to him, I do not have to worry about financial struggles, social exclusion and instead can devote all my time and effort into studies.
I believe the dissimilarity that he experienced during his childhood is what makes him full of wisdom today. It is true that people who lack the exposure to particular things in the past are the ones who embrace it the best in the future, such as my father with the jump from poverty to being well-off.
