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I'm applying to NTU, and I need to submit an essay along with my scholarship application. This is what I have written.
Please help me review if there's something that I can improve toward my essay, thanks!
Q: Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.
To me, perseverance is the belief I highly value in my life, and I also do everything with it. Firstly, I consider perseverance to be the key to success in many aspects of my life. Some goals need time and dedication to be achieved, while it may be toilsome and difficult during preparation. If it were not for perseverance, I wouldn't enjoy the sense of achievement after accomplishing the tasks. From studying hard for the tests to participating in competitions, etc., the processes are not easy at all. However, I implement the same attitude to insist on what I do, which not only enables me to maintain good grades at school but also to be outstanding in many competitions.
In addition, perseverance also turns my failures into a learning opportunity and makes me grow. Take my science project for example. I started it two years ago, and during my research, I did lots of experiments and came up with numerous ideas in my project. In the science fair first year, however, I got harsh criticism toward my project. Then from the comments, I realized that there were plenty of problems and deficiencies in my project and my expression way. I didn't quit because of the failure. Instead, I modified my experiments and improved the shortcomings. Ultimately, I got the first prize next year. That was not only an unforgettable memory but a practical skill that I learned during the process.
Conclude all I mentioned above, that's why I put emphasis on perseverance all the time. I hope that this attitude can help to mold me into a successful person future at NTU.
I'm applying to NTU, and I need to submit an essay along with my scholarship application. This is what I have written.
Please help me review if there's something that I can improve toward my essay, thanks!
Q: Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.
To me, perseverance is the belief I highly value in my life, and I also do everything with it. Firstly, I consider perseverance to be the key to success in many aspects of my life. Some goals need time and dedication to be achieved, while it may be toilsome and difficult during preparation. If it were not for perseverance, I wouldn't enjoy the sense of achievement after accomplishing the tasks. From studying hard for the tests to participating in competitions, etc., the processes are not easy at all. However, I implement the same attitude to insist on what I do, which not only enables me to maintain good grades at school but also to be outstanding in many competitions.
In addition, perseverance also turns my failures into a learning opportunity and makes me grow. Take my science project for example. I started it two years ago, and during my research, I did lots of experiments and came up with numerous ideas in my project. In the science fair first year, however, I got harsh criticism toward my project. Then from the comments, I realized that there were plenty of problems and deficiencies in my project and my expression way. I didn't quit because of the failure. Instead, I modified my experiments and improved the shortcomings. Ultimately, I got the first prize next year. That was not only an unforgettable memory but a practical skill that I learned during the process.
Conclude all I mentioned above, that's why I put emphasis on perseverance all the time. I hope that this attitude can help to mold me into a successful person future at NTU.