'I can obtain adequate professional resources and personal powers' -why Ohio State

There are many reasons for why I am interested in this school, from academic to student-oriented clubs, but the main reason for me that I feel Ohio State University fits me and truly represents who I am and will hopefully be shaped into.

The top computer science program Ohio State University provides which ranks the 25th best program in America and the top undergraduate engineering program in Ohio would be conducive to my dream of being an extraordinary software engineer, since computing has become the key enabler of rapid advances that have occurred, and that would continue for the foreseeable future. Furthermore, the courses Ohio State University provides would benefit students to set up rudimentary but essential knowledge for their future career, courses like Engineering survey and CSE technical electives and capstone which were provided by this respected university will not only give me the knowledge but the confidence to enter the computer field.

Besides, Ohio State University is known for his student clubs. Among which I am fond of Block "O" the largest student-run organization in Ohio State University, and I hope that I could be one of them in the future. I am a student who is full of enthusiasm for club activities. I consider that club activities would train me to be well-rounded person who has excellent written and spoken communication skills, team work spirit. Moreover, I prefer communicating with people from different cultures; I believe Ohio State University's club activities held by Block "O" could provide me with chances.

I strongly believe that Ohio State University as one of the top universities in the world is the place where I can obtain adequate professional resources and personal powers to achieve my dream.

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I love it, and I LOVE OSU! (: