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Just one day in a variety of many; describe a typical day in your life in the future UWC scholarship


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Sep 2, 2016   #1
Describe a typical day in your life in the year 2026.

Hanoi is on the threshold to the winter season. As it is still early in the morning, the road is deserted with only some store opening in the flickering light. Gusts of wind were blowing, wafting over thousands of autumn leaves on the pavement. Standing on the balcony of my apartment, I inhale a breath of fresh air, comfortably look down the roads with a sense of excitement although the scene is endlessly familiar to me. Perhaps it is due to occupational habits, for a photographer always takes pleasure in observing things.

I have worked as a photographer in the editorial office of a known magazine for almost two years after graduating from a university in London. I usually begin working at 8am so I have plenty of time to spare. I like to spend this precious time observing my surroundings. Sometimes I walk down the streets, carrying along my camera and capture every little thing that attracts my attention. Through the lens of the camera, ordinary scenes suddenly transform into unique ones. They all become so flawless, yet evanescent that as though it would fleet in one second if I did not cherish the moment instantly.

Up early to wend my way through the rush hour traffic, full of kit and a large cup of strong coffee. Arrive at the office, I immediately prepare for the shoot by setting light up for the background and recheck the items. When the models and assistants come, the photo shoot start. Unlike other types of photographer, fashion photographer specializes in taking pictures that showcase clothing shoes and other accessories. They must be able to understand lighting and be able to direct models in ways that emphasize the fashion on display. In Vietnam where fashion deserves little attention, fashion photographer faces many challenges. Low investment lowers the quality of the shoot, thereby Vietnam is no competitor when standing with other countries. However, with the deep passion, I decide to follow this path despite knowing that it is not smooth. Via every photo for the magazine, I hope to breathe new life into Vietnam fashion and increase it to a global level in the near future.

Lunch, as is often the way on busy shoots, consists of some slices of breads consumed in breaks between subjects. I take advantage of the time to gossip with the models, engage shy ones in conservation so that they feel more comfortable and pose better in front of my camera.

The shoot day continue in the afternoon. '' Turn around a little. Eyes up. Smile more naturally. Good. Hands up. Ok!'' The sound of the camera continually resounded. Shoot wraps up at 5.30pm, after a long day of photographing many different subjects.

When I come back home, the clock points 7pm already. I gobble down some food and return to work. Start sorting through all the photographs. As the photos have already been converted from RAW files and the lighting was set up correctly, it's usually just a case of retouching and resizing images. However, as there are piles of them, when I finish it is already bedtime.

Despite the little trial and tribulations though, I genuinely love what I do and the fact that every day is different. This is just one day in a variety of many.

PLEASE COMMENT ON THE CONTENT OF MY ESSAY. IS IT TOO BLAND, OR BORING OR NOT ENOUGH INSPIRATIONAL OR SOMETHING ELSE. AND CAN YOU GUYS GIVE ME SOME ADVICE WHAT I SHOULD ADD INTO MINE TO BE MORE IMPRESSIVE? THANKS IN ADVANCE.

ramzi06 9 / 17 4  
Sep 2, 2016   #2
Greetings Mr/Mrs Duong Thi
to speak frankly, when I read yours, I feel like I'm the subject and experience the whole story and that's the good points. More importantly, the combination of high level vocabularies among sentences and paragraph are also excellent in my opinion.

only minor mistakes I found

I have worked as a photographer in the editorial office, (this sentence sounds awkward even if the grammar is correct. More britain natives prefer to use "I have been working as ...." rather than "I have worked.. " )

Up early to wend my way through the rush hour traffic, full of kit ... (in this sentences, I presume is not complete since only no verb detected. please check it for the structure first )

However, as there are piles of them, when ... > better for you to change it like =>However, dealing with piles of them will usually be finished when the time indicates bedtime .

That's all,


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