My plans for some years ahead after study in Korea

Hi~ I'm applying to the KGSP scholarship and I have to write about the following: Future plan in Korea or another country after study in Korea.

I wrote like a little draft about it so I'd like to read all your suggestions, recommendations, critics, etc . Thanks in advance for all your help.

FUTURE PLAN

My professional future, upon culminating my master program in Korea, can be considered in two ways: stay in Korea and continue my education or continue my studies in another foreign country.

The first path is to become a medical resident in Korea itself, for which I must acquire the knowledge of the Korean language to the level required to practice the profession in the country. This must be achieved while my master's studies are in progress. Submitting to the necessary evaluations to revalidate my professional medical degree and later applying to the medical residency programs, which will allow me to practice medicine in Korea and become a Medical Genetics specialist. During my years of medical residency I will get the maximum knowledge both theoretical and practical, and the necessary contacts that will allow me to develop myself as a better professional in the field. This knowledge acquired in Korea will be of great use in my country and I intend to disseminate them in a university that welcomes me, it could be my alma mater or any other university that could be interested in it. My final purpose is to create a medical center that fulfills various functions such as genetic research, medical consultations, clinical laboratory and genetic counseling, and at the same time a medical center that has international connections that allow joint projects of high quality in genetics.

The second path is, with the knowledge acquired during the master program, to become a medical resident in the US or Canada as they have the specialty that interests me and a level of technology and knowledge in genetics similar to those that exist in Korea. Once I finish my residency, I will stay there while I acquire the experience and knowledge necessary to create and maintain a medical center specialized in genetics in my country.

All this will contribute to the achievement of one of my most desired aspirations both personal and professional, and to put at the service of my country all the knowledge that I may have acquired during my training and academic specialization.

Carolina, this is to be written as a post study plan. As the title of the essay implies, post, means "after" so to say that you will work on becoming a resident in Korea during your masters studies, take up language proficiency, are wrong. The language proficiency needs to be acquired within one year and your TOPIK level must be at 3 or above in order to go through to the actual masters degree studies, fail the TOPIK twice and you don't proceed. Your scholarship will immediately be cancelled. So do not start the essay from the point where you still have to gain language proficiency. Start at the point AFTER you have finished the 2 year masters degree.

Assume that you have passed all the language requirements and are now completely educated. You have already graduate. What comes next? Stay in Korea? How? That is the only time you should consider your residency at a Korean hospital. How many years will you work there? At what point will you decide if you should enroll again or move to another country for more experience?

Revise the essay to present a clearer idea of what your post study plans are. Do not start with language proficiency because that is the end of the line for most of the KGSP scholarship applicants. Assume you made it through to the very end then discuss what your resident career will be like. Do not discuss the documents required. That is unnecessary at this point. Just focus on your career plans after your graduation. Don't get too technical because that is how you made this grave error in your essay discussion development.

@Holt
thank you, I'll write another essay with all your recommendations. I have one question, can I say that if I can't revalidate my medical degree I'll go to another country for the residency program?

You are expected to spend a number of years after you graduate working in Korea. So you cannot say that if you cannot get a license to practice in Korea, you will complete your residency elsewhere. If you are uncertain about your chances of getting a validated license in Korea, then talk about something else instead, along the lines of still working within your profession in the country. For example, you can work in a licensed doctor's office or clinic where you can be exposed to further observational opportunities related to your degree. Spend a few years doing observations and then, upon the validation of your license. Start your own practice. After a few more years, then you can say that you will go to other countries to seek further training under a PhD program.

@Holt
Okay, I tried to write a new essay taking some ideas from my previous one. Please feel free to make any correction or give any recommendation, suggestion or critics... that would help me a lot! Thank you.

Good work Carolina. Go ahead and use this version of the essay. It is concise and delivers a clear career path for yourself after you complete your masters degree. There is no information in the essay that be considered irrelevant as you covered everything up to the start of your quest for a PhD, also in Korea. That is sure to impress the reviewer because you clearly wish to imbibe their culture and traditions to the point where you could eventually be considered to be one of them. This has the convincing power required to show the reviewer that you will be taking your career seriously and that you plan on paying back, in kind to the country and government that chose to sponsor your studies and your stay in Korea.