How will the proposed study contribute to your career?
I am going to enter the middle level of management at ABC. On that level, I do not only need daily working experiences but also managerial skills. As an established company, ABC has common problems such as innovation related to financial reporting. Sometimes the system that already applied has to be addressed and improved to meet the needs in the framework of preparing the financial statements effective and efficient.
My future goals are to be a specialist in accounting. My bachelor's degree in Accounting and my master's degree in Accounting and Business Information Systems have prepared me with a strong ground in theoretical aspects of both sciences. My capability in accounting will strengthen in the ability to analyze financial statements and decision-making. While my capability in business information system will give me knowledge and skills of improving the existing financial performance.
How have you contributed to solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform?
In my working environment, I always put my concern in an effective and efficient ways of working. I always analyze on tasks which cannot be finished in a targeted time. By the time I found out there was something wrong with the working system, I always discuss with our team to obtain the solution.
In 2009 until 2012, I was on reporting division. My tasks were to handle an accountability report of capital budget to the government. At first, there was nobody cared about the report and nobody realized that it effects company's cash flow. The slower the report, the longer the cashflow get into the company. At that time, I tried to finish all the pending report. there were about two thousand pending reports. at first, at least it needed five workers and about a week in order to complete just one report. Realizing the situation and the slow progress, I created a system that connects all parties involved. I cut the time by making it online. As a result, during three years, I can finish all the two thousand pending reports not include the current reports. ABC has become the best KKKS which has the fastest progress. Automatically, it also contributed to the improvement in the asset valuation in annual report and FQR.
On that level, I do not only need daily working[work] experiences but also managerial skills. As an established company, ABC has common problems such as innovation related to financial reporting.
[better to say: such as lack of innovation in their financial reporting system]
Sometimes the system that already applied[that has been already applied] has to be addressed and improved [be improved] to meet the needs in the framework of preparing the financial statements effective and efficient .[I didn't understand this sentence. it would be better to change it]
My future goals are to be a specialist[an expert] in accounting. My bachelor's degree[is] in Accounting and my master's degree [is] in Accounting[better to say: (...) prepared me with a strong ground[background] in theoretical aspects of both sciences.
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I always analyze on [remove it] tasks which cannot ...
By the time I found out there was something wrong with the working system [working systems], I always discuss with ...
Hi Adhesti, I would like to share some thoughts on the first prompt.
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There you have it Adhesti, I hope you are able to follow through with the corrections and come up with a much stronger essay. Overall, this essay answered the prompt properly,it is somehow, straight to the point and a little remark is needed to keep it strong and in the process, strengthen the entire essay.
thank you... i have corrected the mistakes. One question left. please help...
Hi Adhesti, no worries, we are here to assist you.
Please find the remarks for the 2nd prompt.
How have you contributed to solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform?
- I always put my concern in an
- effectivivity and efficiencyways of working.
- I always analyze on tasks
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- in a targetedgiven time.
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- report of the capital budget
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- reports will be finished, however this is does not include the current reports.
There you have it Adhesti, I hope the corrections above help in your revision and may you continue to write, learn and read anytime and anyway you can, this is the only way you can get better at this craft.
