HI. I'm not sure if you answered the task "Tell us about one of ...". Maybe it was a mistake and it was an answer to another question?
Overall I think it's an interesting essay with a good flow, easy to understand and interesting. You use a wide range of lexical resource and almost no grammatical error I believe.
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You mixed up your question presentations. This response is meant for a different Questbridge essay regarding the proudest moment in your life. Please make sure that you accurately use the prompt questions. Any mistakes can result in the denial of your application. In this case it like you were asked "1+1" then, instead of answering 2, you responded "The Life of Pi". Any reviewer could think you were not serious about your application and immediately end your quest for admissions there.
Going back to the essay with the wrong topic, you do not need to argue with anybody. You are only being asked about who your would want to meet, why, and how that day would go. You gave a history lesson instead. So your response is totally incorrect and cannot be used for this application. The questions you posed are fine. The problem, is that there was no hypothetical interaction and response within your essay.
Assume you were to physically meet him. Where would it be? Why there? How would you ask the questions? Why those questions? How do you expect him to respond? Imagine the meeting and relate it to the reader. Be creative. Make sure to sound thrilled at the meeting. Be in awe. Make it seem like you came away from that day having learned something about the person or the cause that no other person could have without meeting him in person.