'raised speaking english and spanish' Discuss the subjects in which you have excelled

My dedication in school and my mother's hard work are what attribute my success in various subjects. The subjects I have excelled on are spanish, mathematics and science. I love speaking and writing spanish. I believe I am very fluent in spanish and I am proud to say that I come from a Hispanic family. My mother is Honduran she raised me speaking both english and spanish; which benefits me in a variety of ways. Since little I remember I was always asked to translate in stores, in the restaurants, in the beach I mean everywhere! One summer when I was 15 I started working at a grocery store as a demonstrator. Most of the managers didn't speak spanish when most of the employees and customers only spoke spanish. It sure was difficult to communicate, most of the day all I did was translate what the customers and employees asked or said to the manager, but truly that wasn't my job but I sure loved doing it. Math and science have been my strongest subjects. I love the ability to use mathematics and science and incorporate it into the real world applications. However, this year pre-calculus has been getting extremely tough! Let's just see where it goes from here.

First sentence- take out your mother's hard work. You may be grateful towards her, but the school probably doesn't care. In fact, they will probably want people who excel on their own.

Just say that you are fluent in Spanish, instead of "you believe that you are fluent". Be confident! This is a subject in which you've excelled, remember?

"Most of the managers...while most of the employees..."

"Although that was not my job, I sure loved doing it"

Don't say pre-calc was extremely tough. Say you love a challenge, even in pre-calc, which many struggled with.

Ending was kind of flippant, I don't know.

are what have attributed to my success in various subjects

I am proud to say that I come from a Hispanic family. why?

Since little I was a young child I rememberI was alwaysbeing asked

One summer when I was 15,

AlthoughMm ost of the customers only spoke spanish, most of the managers didn't speak spanish when most of the employees and customers only spoke spanish.the language.

Although it was not my duty, I enjoyed helping.but truly that wasn't my job but I sure loved doing it.

You mention that your mother and your own hard work have contributed to your success. However in reading your essay, I don't feel that you have really articulated these ideas. Further explore these ideas.