Stipendium Hungaricum Scholarship Motivation Letter in Environmental Engineering

Please grade my essay:

Dear Admission Committee of Hungarian University of Agriculture and Life Science, I'm writing to convey my interest in applying for Environmental Engineering in MATE.

Graduating from Computer, and Network Engineering in vocational high school, my previous study had equipped me with a basic knowledge related to computers, and technologies. Even though my study is about computers, I choose environmental engineering because of the urgent waste environmental issues in my village, where inadequate sanitation and direct disposal of household waste into the sea threaten both marine ecosystems and the livelihood of the fisherman. My concern for the environment began when I was in junior high school. The community service activities we did, made me realize how dangerous waste is to marine life, especially plastic waste, which is difficult to decompose. As a Bajaunese, whose life is inseparable from the sea, I have witnessed how poor sanitation and waste disposal practices severely affect both health and livelihoods. This personal background drives my commitment to develop solutions for a better sanitation, and cleaner marine environment, focusing on developing innovative environmental technologies and conducting environmental impact assessments to support sustainable development. With this scholarship program, will help me to achieve this goal.

I'm particularly drawn to this University because it's vision align with my goals, to have an up to date and applied knowledge of Science, specially in Environmental technology, ecology and Environmental management. I hope by studying in the Hungarian University of Agriculture and Life Science, will deepen my knowledge, therefore i will be able to indentify environmental risks in different areas, capable of participating in the prevention, reduction and removal of environmental hazards and damages, as well as operating low-waste and energy efficient technologies. With the knowledge I gain, I plan to design community-based waste management initiatives, promote recycling practices, and collaborate with local authorities to improve sanitation infrastructure in my village.

Pursuing undergraduate studies will be equipping me with the knowledge I need to contribute to my community.I am committed to making the most of this scholarship opportunity to grow, give back, and inspire others.

Thank you for considering my application.
Your Sincerely.

The problem with this application essay is that your high school education does not support your choice of college major. It will be difficult for the reviewer to reconcile your studies in computers with your desire to have a degree in Environmental Engineering. You have to consider that your actual written interview does not reflect any skills or academic learning that you have built in this area. Therefore you will struggle as a student of this course in college. Unless you can convince the reviewer that you have taken some courses relevant to developing an environment engineering process, which you plan to be the pioneer of, I do not see how you will be considered for this scholarship. Bear in mind that the scholarship candidates will have far stronger credentials than you, and all relevant to their chosen major, so the reviewer will not spend too much time considering an irrelevant application such as yours.