MY STUDY PLAN FOR A SCHOLARSHIP AWARD - the peerless University of Botswana

Please help review and make suggestions to improve my study plan bellow, thanks!

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the fight against diseases

Infectious diseases are caused by different pathogenic microorganisms, such as bacteria, viruses, parasites or fungi; the diseases can be spread, directly or indirectly, from one person to another. Over time, a very high mortality rate has been recorded from many of these diseases which resulted from poor understanding of the disease-causing agents hence, a good understanding of the different microorganisms and their disease causing capability is necessary to address this condition.

My experience at Good Shepherd Medical Centre Laboratory during my undergraduate internship exposed me to the diversity and the roles of microorganisms in different disease conditions hence, the need to acquire more knowledge in this field. With my background in Microbiology, I hope to use the knowledge of a master degree in this field to gain more understanding on different groups of microorganism and the application of this knowledge for improved control and elimination of these disease-causing agents.

My long term goal is to become a research scientist and an academic in a Nigerian University. Within five years after graduating, I hope to extend my research to earn a PhD at a program of international reputation and contribute immensely to knowledge I will be proud of. To achieve this goal, acquiring my master degree in a reputable university will avail me to do so.

Known for excellent training, the peerless University of Botswana remains one of the oldest in the South African region. The high recognition gained in innovative researches, presence of qualified and experienced faculties, excellent laboratory facilities and a good number of competent graduates trained in the past spurred my interest to study at this university.

I recognize the role this scholarship would play in funding me. This will give me an opportunity to exploit new technologies to support the fight against diseases. Thank you for your time and consideration.

John, you presented an overview of why you want to gain a masters degree in Microbiology but you did not indicate the reason you chose to study this particular course. There is no thesis statement reference as to what you hope to accomplish by studying the particular course. Consider the requirements of a microbiologist these days. What is the field in the forefront of as of now? How do you hope to contribute to this field? Through the specific study of what area of microbiology? What discovery or improvement in a microbiological process do you hope to achieve?

Connect your reason for your choice of university with your academic goals and career objectives. How do you specifically envision the specific courses you will be taking at the university What sort of academic training do you hope to achieve and how? Your discussion of this aspect of the prompt is not informative nor helpful to your application as you only give a generalized reference to your reasons for university choice.

The reason you chose to study in South Africa doesn't make sense. It doesn't explain how the country will be able to help you with your education in a specific manner. based on the possible internship programs the microbiological laboratories in the country can offer you in order to add to your practical training in the field. You should look into this area in order to strengthen your presentation of reasons in response to the prompt. Do not confuse this with the reason why you chose the university.

You do not really cite a specific course that the university offers which enticed you to enroll there. It appears that you are unfamiliar with the course curriculum and offerings so that you only respond in general terms. This creates a weak response and shows that you are just responding to the prompt for the sake of responding. Which translate into an image of you not really being serious about your application to the university.

Please represent information about your previous study, not work experience because it is your college degree and how it prepared your academic foundation for the masters degree that the reviewer is interested in. The professional experience that you present should be expanded to reflect you can improve your position within your current career, positioning you for future employment. Discussing your long term goal is appropriate, but you must reflect the required elements of the prompt first. So present the academic relevance, discuss how it prepared you for a masters course, then describe how the masters course ties in with your future career plan. There is no clear connection between the three being presented in your current paragraph.

Honestly, it is a really great exposition of your ideas. I think that as they said, you may introduce ideas of an specific contribution you want to do and why can be a Nigerian University the best choice for your course. You can also write about your inspirations and what will you give back to the institute if you obtain the scholarship.