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How can study in Sweden and Masters degree help you reach your goal? Your Future plans? M.Letter


lakshmi_k 1 / - 1  
Nov 7, 2015   #1
1) How can studying in Sweden help you fulfill your career goals? 2) How can a Master's degree in Electric Power Engineering at KTH Royal Institute of Technology University help you to fulfill your career goals? 3) In your future career, how will you continue to work within electric power engineering?

The essay is limited to 300 words maximum.
please suggest me how can i improve my essay.
I have written 309 words

I decided to pursue a master's degree in Sweden which prioritizes real world problems. Swedish universities has emphasis on developing the ability to question the status quo by assessing information, seeking new perspectives and coming up with well-informed opinions, the informal and non-hierarchical nature of Swedish society, where everyone is encouraged to contribute ideas and opinions will help me think innovatively. Sweden's higher education system has the world's most coveted and prestigious academic distinction according to The Times Higher Education, which motivated me to apply. The important characteristic that I will need for success in my career is creativity which is exactly I intend to evolve while studying in Sweden, along with other in-demand skills such as how combining theory and practice, and how to navigate complex situations where there's no easy solution these techniques are well vexed with the courses that Swedish universities offer.

The Electric Power Engineering programme offered by KTH that focus on power system dynamics, stability and control, as well as on electricity markets that partners with ABB drew my interest towards the university, involving with the PSSC (power system stability and control) Research Group which develops techniques that will impact today's operating power reliability and transmission efficiency will help me reach my goal of providing reliable power supply to densely populated countries. I would also like to study Information and Control Systems courses focusing on automation, operation, and control of electrical drives and industrial control which will provide a strong boost to my career prospects.

With the knowledge I gain from the academia at KTH and the network I develop with the industries will help me in future to conduct research on development of renewable energy integration, reducing transmission losses and improving grid stability for heavily populated countries such as my home country in order to overcome the energy situation that cripples its economy.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 8, 2015   #2
Lakshmik, it is not enough for you to explain that the reason you chose to study in Sweden is because of the ability of the Swedish universities to teach their classes based upon real world problems. Since the latter part of your essay indicates a desire on your part to do some sort of future research in relation to your major, you should instead, try to explain that the reason that you chose to enroll in Sweden is because their university offerings provide you with the opportunity to attend classes that can help you to further understand the underlying causes of the electrical problems in your home country. Discuss the breakthroughs that Sweden has developed in their quest to end the problems related to electric power engineering in their country and how you hope to be able to use the shared technological lessons to help improve the status of your own country.

Right now, the first half of your essay does not really prodice a solid interest or connection between your academic interests and the chosen university. The information that you provide is so generic that you could be describing any university in Sweden, not just KTH. So you need to make sure that you discuss the reasons why only KTH, as the university you have chosen in Sweden, is the only university that can fulfill your educational criteria.

When they ask you how studying in Sweden can help you, don't be misled by the question. They are not discussing Sweden in general. Rather, they mean to have you focus your response on the KTH experience with the possibility of utilizing the internships and training programs of the government of Sweden in helping you to achieve your goals. Answering that part of the essay may require you to Google the latest energy innovations to come out of Sweden in order to properly respond to the question, but that will be the correct and expected response to the query. Connect the Swedish internships and training programs with your future KTH experience.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 9, 2015   #3
- I decided to pursue a master's degree in Sweden whichas they are known to prioritizes real world problems.
- ideas and opinions will help me think innovativelydevelop in an innovative manner .

Lakshmik, as much as your essay talks about your intended country to study your masters, the essay is asking you for the information that led you to choosing the university and the course you are about to take. Therefore, I suggest that you omit a couple of sentences and boost the body of the essay towards the needed information of the prompt.

Let's continue.

- Group whichthat develops techniques

- With the knowledge I gain from the academia at KTH I suggest you elaborate the study or the learning that you gained from KTH that influenced your decision to apply to this institution, this is really crucial for the success of your application ) and the network

- I develop with the industries will helpassist me in the future to

There you have it Lakshmik, I hope I'm able to help.


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