Adding technology to a school is like building a monument. With a prudent blueprint, the structure is made stronger and its appeal greater.
haha, I already love it. When you begin to write, you need to have a big buildup of energy. I think you did that here and got inspired... google: possessed by paul james men men men ...
and see that buildup in action. If you have already seen it, it's worth watching again...
I think one more sentence needs to be added to that para #1. Add a thesis sentence that is powerful enough to knock the reader over. I think you need to add a sentence to the end of that 1st para to present your theme. Tech. can be a good or bad investment, because, just like all other aspects of teaching, it must be strongly oriented toward the purpose. Some technology I have seen in classrooms is just silly and distracting.
I like what you wrote about a positive attitude. Maybe that can be your theme. Inspiration must come first, then learning. The student must be inspired before she can be taught.