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Prompt: "Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?"
I always had a mindset that if you weren't good at a skill then you shouldn't attempt to do it until one day during November 2009. I was 14 at the time, I had fallen in love with martial arts and I self-taught myself some forms of the art during the summer, I thought I finally had found a talent. One day I asked my uncle, who studied changquan and taijiquan, if he would teach me what he knew so I could too be as skilled as him in those 2 martial arts forms, he gladly accepted to be my teacher.
I had thought that martial arts were my talent but I soon found out I was very wrong. My uncle would scold me every day during practice; I was doing all the moves incorrectly. He had told me that I was his worst student and that my cousin was a far better student than I am. I was just about to give up until I had remembered what my father told me, "Anything is possible if you have enough power and determination". I know I had power and determination and I began to work harder and study the martial art forms I was so passionate about.
My uncle very quickly had seen my changes during the training sessions and was amazed at how well I had become. He was so amazed that he had set up a match against me and my cousin who had also been practicing these same martial arts, but for two years while I only had one month. I knew that even though my cousin had more experience than me, I could still win the match.
Finally the day of the match had come, I was unsure if I was going to win. I ran up and did a "ce kong fan", which is an aerial cartwheel, my cousin was surprised seeing this because it was a move he still had not mastered even after practicing for 11 months more than I did. Finally our uncle had begun the first round, my cousin took position, I took mine, he quickly attempted a strike at me but I deflected it and gave him 3 quick shots to the body, he stumbled back and without any hesitation I quickly knew what to do next almost like instinct, I ran to him then jumped off his chest and hit him with a finishing move I had learned in my last practice. The whole match lasted only about 40 seconds.
I am very proud of that day and my whole experience leading up to it because it had taught me a very important lesson; any skill can be improved with enough work, passion, and motivation. I also learned to never give up because there is nothing to gain from it. I now try to improve any skill I find myself lacking in because I have proof from this experience that it is possible to do. I feel that because of this experience I am now a harder working person, ready for anything that comes into my way.
Prompt: "Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?"
I always had a mindset that if you weren't good at a skill then you shouldn't attempt to do it until one day during November 2009. I was 14 at the time, I had fallen in love with martial arts and I self-taught myself some forms of the art during the summer, I thought I finally had found a talent. One day I asked my uncle, who studied changquan and taijiquan, if he would teach me what he knew so I could too be as skilled as him in those 2 martial arts forms, he gladly accepted to be my teacher.
I had thought that martial arts were my talent but I soon found out I was very wrong. My uncle would scold me every day during practice; I was doing all the moves incorrectly. He had told me that I was his worst student and that my cousin was a far better student than I am. I was just about to give up until I had remembered what my father told me, "Anything is possible if you have enough power and determination". I know I had power and determination and I began to work harder and study the martial art forms I was so passionate about.
My uncle very quickly had seen my changes during the training sessions and was amazed at how well I had become. He was so amazed that he had set up a match against me and my cousin who had also been practicing these same martial arts, but for two years while I only had one month. I knew that even though my cousin had more experience than me, I could still win the match.
Finally the day of the match had come, I was unsure if I was going to win. I ran up and did a "ce kong fan", which is an aerial cartwheel, my cousin was surprised seeing this because it was a move he still had not mastered even after practicing for 11 months more than I did. Finally our uncle had begun the first round, my cousin took position, I took mine, he quickly attempted a strike at me but I deflected it and gave him 3 quick shots to the body, he stumbled back and without any hesitation I quickly knew what to do next almost like instinct, I ran to him then jumped off his chest and hit him with a finishing move I had learned in my last practice. The whole match lasted only about 40 seconds.
I am very proud of that day and my whole experience leading up to it because it had taught me a very important lesson; any skill can be improved with enough work, passion, and motivation. I also learned to never give up because there is nothing to gain from it. I now try to improve any skill I find myself lacking in because I have proof from this experience that it is possible to do. I feel that because of this experience I am now a harder working person, ready for anything that comes into my way.