adjectives, help with intro sentence- Austen

In this piece, the author paints Austen in a way different from my preconceptions of her; adjectives such as "radical," "ferocious" and "revolutionary," clearly set a precedent for an interesting and new view of Austen

I think you should divide this sentence in two. Although I, myself, like more this kind of sentences with semi colons and everything I think they don't call attention. So I would change that. Also, I don't think the quotation marks are necessary. Consider word choice in the first part "in a way different from my preconceptions of her..." I think you can rephrase this and make it work better.

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Well, the semi-colon establishes for the reader that these 2 aspects are part of the same thought, and that is important in a thesis sentence.

Shannon, did you mean intro sentence or thesis sentence. I think an intro sentence should declare something interesting and sort of general... something about life in general, something to which the reader can relate.

Your sentence is good as a thesis sentence, though I don't think it is necessary to talk about how it was news to you. I think you should express the idea that people should go deeper in their understanding about Austen to see how revolutionary and bold she was. That is a solid thesis sentence.

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