3 Admissions Paragraphy Essay - career goals, education

I need help. ) : Paragraph 1 - What are my career goals? Paragraph 2 - How do I expect this institute to help me attain those goals? Paragraph 3 - What ways am I willing to commit and participate for my education to be successful. I have a basic outline of what I want to say, but I need editing help and small ideas.

My career goal is to obtain an enjoyable career in which I can not only express my love for photography, but one that will also challenge and further my artistic abilities. I also wish to explore many different non-traditional methods of photography.

I expect an education at the Art Institute of Philadelphia to help me attain my goals by giving me the experience I need for a career I will be passionate about.

I am very determined to achieve, if not to excel in my chosen career goals. Therefore, I am willing to participate in whatever programs and activities that are necessary to fulfilling my purpose at this institute.

Good afternoon.

What kinds of non-traditional photography methods are you interested in? Providing some further detail about this here would be very helpful.

What kind of experiences do you think you will need for your career goals? How can the institute help you with that?

What exactly is your purpose for attending the insitutite? What kinds of programs will you be looking for?

I hope this helps.

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I rewrote it...

My goal is to obtain an enjoyable career in which I cannot only express my love for photography but also challenge and further my artistic abilities.

I expect an education at the Art Institute of Philadelphia to help attain these goals by giving me the experience I need for a career about which I can be passionate. I also believe that this particular institute offers just the programs that will help me become a successful photographer. In high school I have taken many different art courses such as, Intro to Art, Painting I, and Visual Communications I. I have taken these classes to further my talents for a creative future.

I am very determined to achieve, even excel, in my chosen career goals I am prepared to put forth as much effort as I can. Therefore, I am willing to participate in all of the programs and activities that are necessary to fulfill my purpose at the Art Institute of Philadelphia.

What kinds of non-traditional photography methods are you interested in? Providing some further detail about this here would be very helpful. : More urban and abandoned scenery, textures, and anything thought provoking.

What kind of experiences do you think you will need for your career goals? How can the institute help you with that? : I'll need experience with all types of cameras, equiptment, and some softwear used to edit pictures. The institute will help me by introducing me to new and different ideas and ways of looking through the lense.

What exactly is your purpose for attending the insitutite? What kinds of programs will you be looking for? : My purpose is to gain experience using different kinds of cameras and equiptment needed to be successful. I'll be on the look-out for programs that open my eyes to new and different techniques.