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What appeals you to Emory University, aside from the obvious. Emory Supplement


pridge1 1 / 1  
Jan 4, 2010   #1
Many students decide to apply to Emory University based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons as a possible college choice, why is Emory University a particularly good match for you?

As a Georgia citizen, I have seen multiple friends, family members, and peers select to attend Emory University. As a child, I had always been interested in going to Emory only because everyone around me only spoke positively about his or her experiences. As I progressed into high school, I researched more about the colleges I was interested in, Emory being one of them. I began to realize Emory was immensely well rounded and presented various opportunities to its students. With nine different schools and multiple majors, Emory University holds high expectations from their students and pushes them to advance on soaring level of intellect. Emory also emphasizes the importance of volunteering and assisting the community, especially after winning a federal award in 2008 that was concentrated on community service. Emory University also allows all students to engage in athletic sports and enforces physical health on their undergraduate students by requiring them to take physical education courses. Lastly, Emory accepts and motivates cultural diversity. For example the interreligious council has representatives of multiple religious groups around campus. Emory accentuates their students by highlighting educational competiveness, communal obligations, personal health, and cultural awareness, and I feel by going to Emory I would advance and exceed in various aspects of becoming a successful and flourished person.

^I just feel like it may be a little generic, but I went through their website to get supporting details. I don't want it to be boring, because it's information that the admissions board may already know.
Liebe 1 / 542 2  
Jan 4, 2010   #2
been interested in going to Emory only because everyone

^i am sure there are better and more convincing reasons for you wanting to choose Emory.

I began to realize Emory was immensely well rounded and presented various opportunities to its students

With nine different schools and multiple majors, Emory University holds high expectations from their students and pushes them to advance on soaring level of intellect

^Even though this sentence proceeds your earlier statement, this sentence fails to validate your realization on the subjective claim that Emory is immensely well rounded and presents various opportunities. Perhaps an example how, will prove to Emory that you are interested and you actually did do research on the Uni.

Emory University also allows all students to engage in athletic sports

^i think youd find that most colleges in the US do allow students to engage in sports. Whether the students engage in sport, is something else...

Lastly, Emory accepts and motivates cultural diversity. For example the interreligious council has representatives of multiple religious groups around campus.

^What does this mean to you?

I just feel like it may be a little generic, but I went through their website to get supporting details. I don't want it to be boring, because it's information that the admissions board may already know.

^it sure is generic, and it sure is info that Emory already knows. You need to relate the key points of Emory to your interests and what you are looking for in a college experience.

i also think your first three sentences are useless.
ohellothere - / 8  
Jan 4, 2010   #3
Hello :) Just a few thoughts...
I like your answer, but also understand why you may feel it's a tad generic. I don't know the character limit, but if you can, I would add more.

I took a look at Emory's website. Did you see the "Life At Emory" Page? If not, here it is: emory.edu/home/life/index.html

It has some good info on things that are quirky and personal about the school.
For example, I found this: emory.edu/home/about/history/dooley.html
Strange, but kind of cool :)

Though I am not applying to Emory, I have applied to a couple schools with somewhat similar goofy traditions. When talking to people in Admissions, I always got the sense that yes, they were proud of school's academic reputation but that they were also extremely fond of all the little quirky things about the school. I think adding that you were intrigued by some little, extremely unique detail about the school will show that you have really dug beneath the surface of Emory. It will make your essay seem much more personalized too. Talk about how its quirks set it apart, etc. You could always follow up saying you realized along with everything else Emory offers you, you know it would be a place where you could fit in, feel comfortable, and have fun.

Yikes, I've been rambling...hope this helps :)
Envie 4 / 60  
Jan 6, 2010   #4
I think they get generic essays A LOT so it may be in your interest to write a unique one.
grocks6 3 / 12  
Jan 7, 2010   #5
As a Georgia citizen, I have seen multiple friends, family members, and peers selected to attend Emory University.

With nine different schools and multiple majors, Emory University holds high expectations from their students and pushes them to advance on soaring levels of intellect.

Although it does sound a bit generic, its definitely not a bad essay. The only thing I could add is that you might want to try a personal approach to it; that way, the admissions officers will know that you really want to go to their school.


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