been interested in going to Emory only because everyone
^i am sure there are better and more convincing reasons for you wanting to choose Emory.
I began to realize Emory was immensely well rounded and presented various opportunities to its students
With nine different schools and multiple majors, Emory University holds high expectations from their students and pushes them to advance on soaring level of intellect
^Even though this sentence proceeds your earlier statement, this sentence fails to validate your realization on the subjective claim that Emory is immensely well rounded and presents various opportunities. Perhaps an example how, will prove to Emory that you are interested and you actually did do research on the Uni.
Emory University also allows all students to engage in athletic sports
^i think youd find that most colleges in the US do allow students to engage in sports. Whether the students engage in sport, is something else...
Lastly, Emory accepts and motivates cultural diversity. For example the interreligious council has representatives of multiple religious groups around campus.
^What does this mean to you?
I just feel like it may be a little generic, but I went through their website to get supporting details. I don't want it to be boring, because it's information that the admissions board may already know.
^it sure is generic, and it sure is info that Emory already knows. You need to relate the key points of Emory to your interests and what you are looking for in a college experience.
i also think your first three sentences are useless.