It would help if you tell us what the word limit is so that we can better help you analyze and revise the essay. Any chance you can let us know what the word count is at this point? All I can offer for now is an overview of the essay with some revisions to shorten the length. There are some sentences that are too long for the paragraph so I am making some suggested versions of the sentences to help streamline the paper.
- My interest in science steams from a desire to think about unique problem solutions in relation to computer programming and logic
How I can understand everything better, how different I think about the problems in comparison with others, and the different and unique solutions I can find for problems because of my knowledge about computer are what have increased my interest in computer science
As time passes, I feel prouder about my knowledge in this field, and feel more eager to increase it. Moreover, computer science is a science that has no limits in it; no one is going to stop you from developing your knowledge and you always have the chance to create something new and individual.- I've been studying all things computer related relentlessly so I am quite proud and confident about my knowledge in the field. I know that studying computers will offer me infinite learning possibilities and will always allow me to create a new computer programs that will help advance the field.
In addition to routine school works related to computer science, I have participated in four different projects as a member of the computer part of the project. I have
learnt to program with four different computer programming languages, and becoming better at this skill has increased my interest in this field simultaneously.
- I have learned
Overall, this is a very solid short statement. I hope my suggestions help. Good luck with your application :-)