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Application essay for the Art Institute of Seattle - I do live in Washington, about 3 hours on south



shaylynn_97 1 / -  
Nov 20, 2014   #1
The application has two questions you have to answer in approximately 150 words. I have heard on average these essays are about 200-300 words, mine is about 396. This is my dream school so I want my application essay to be as close to perfect as it can be.

The two questions are:
1. What are your career goals and how do you expect your education at The Art Institute of Seattle to help you attain them?
2. In what ways will you participate and commit to your education in order to be successful?

Here is my response.

To start off, I do live in Washington, just about 3 hours south of Seattle. After I finish high school I am more than ready to pack up everything and move at the first chance I get. My freshman year of high school, I was sitting in a first year photography class listening to my teacher ramble off instructions on how to work part of Photoshop, instructions he had explained four times before and I already knew how to do. Somewhere towards the end of his lecture he mentioned that a representative for The Art Institute would be coming in to talk about college opportunities, immediately I was intrigued. I had never heard of The Art Institute before and was ready to learn something about it. That next week a tall lengthy woman was standing by the door when I walked into class. She handed me an information card and just smiled. I sat down at my computer and waited. She started off explaining all the different opportunities offered at the institute, [look up a few]. As a freshman I still did not know exactly what I wanted to do with my life but after being in a photography class and hearing everything the representative had to say I started to get an idea. It still took me about a year to realize it. My junior year I took year 2 of photography. We would go out in pairs and take a whole bunch of pictures going off a certain topic then at the end of the week we would all put one picture up on our computer screens and vote for which one we liked the most. It was around that time, when I started winning a lot of those competitions, I realized I was not too bad at photography and that's when my passion formed. I became really close with the teacher and he taught me a lot, to where now I'm more of his assistant then his student. This year (my senior year) I am in our yearbook class, my teacher and our yearbook presidents talked and made me the "over lord" or head of all photography and told all the other students that their goal was to "out shoot" me. When I am passionate about something and want to learn more, I don't stop; I learn fast and always find ways to improve.

vetementu 9 / 21  
Nov 20, 2014   #2
Well, obviously, I would recommend cutting the word count down a bit. If they suggest 150 words per question, try your best not to go over 300. But I feel as if you're not answering either of the prompts at all. This is a neat story to read, but that's not what the prompt asks you to give. You need to explicitly tell the reader what your career goals are, and how the Art Institute could help you achieve those goals. It's good to add specifics about the Art Institute that lead you to being so passionate about that school. You also need to answer the second question, which you didn't address whatsoever.


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