"applied math" - What you find most appealing about columbia - APMA and Core

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

Note: LitHum = Literature Humanities, CC = Contemporary Civilization

Any thoughts/comments?

There's nothing I can say about applied math hasn't already been made clear by Prof. Wiggins: "Applied math is using mathematics as a tool for thinking clearly about the world." Columbia draws me precisely because of its ability to give undergraduates a scope of the world through the lens of math, whether it is through deriving the Black-Scholes pricing formulae in the Mathematics building, researching meteorology with Prof. Sobel at the Lamont-Doherty Earth Observatory or being treated to the foundations of biophysics by Prof. Wiggins. The vast number of ways applied math can be delved into at Columbia would more than satisfy my curious fascination with math and its purpose in the world.

However, my attraction to Columbia also stems from its unique Core, which eliminates any competitive disadvantage and pushes students to leave their comfort zone. I know many distinctive perspectives will emerge in my LitHum and CC classes, enabling multifaceted discussions, as students of all areas of study will bring their own knowledge to the classroom. Life is too fluid to be planned out and unexpected things always happen, but the Core will nevertheless leave me with lasting habits of intellectual inquiry and guide me to a more successful life. Columbia is about the individual, about exploring yourself, and that is felt both through traipsing across College Walk when returning from a night in the city and by picking your head up in Butler only to realize the night sky is fading to pink.

Good job! I like your word choices. You have a very good vocabulary.

one thing I think you could improve is the first sentence

"There's nothing I can say about applied math hasn't already been made clear by Prof. Wiggins..."

You should try drawing in more attention as opposed to stating that you have nothing to say. Reading the first sentence already draws the read away, because you "can't say anything that hasn't been said"

Other than that, there's no major grammar mistakes I can point out. Overall good essay, just try grabbing your readers attention a little more at the start of your essay

leave me with lasting habits of intellectual inquiry and guide me to a more successful life.
My suggestion hear would be to be a bit more specific when saying "successful life" Saying that makes it sound very vague and impersonal. Just a suggestion.