Archery, Swimming, Reading, building - Stuff you do for the pleasure of it - MIT

Hi everyone,

I still can't figure out what to write about, but i have 5 ideas. Can u please tell me which one would make me look better for MIT ?? (i love doing all of those)

Archery, Swimming, Reading, building stuff & tearing them apart , figuring stuff out (you know, like Richard Feynman)

Thanks a lot

Considering that it's MIT, I'd consider building and deconstructing things as the best topic, as it seems more intellectual than archery, and more unique than reading.

MIT Short Essays: Something you do for the pleasure of it (Archery) and Why EECS ??

I've written 2 answers for each question. Can you please tell me which answer is better and any improvements you think i can make. Thanks A Lot

1. We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

"A perfect set" is the best thing you can hear on the archery range. Since I was 10, I've fallen in love with the game of archery. As a kid, I've always liked characters such as Robin Hood and Legolas and thought they were more powerful than the other characters as they had the advantage of killing their opponent over a distance. As I started to play archery, I became more fascinated by the game. When I draw the arrow, my whole body is tensed and I am fully focused on the X. As I release the arrow, all my muscles are relaxed and for a split-second, I am completely relaxed and I can forget about all my problems

OR

I am not a violent person, yet something about shooting arrows simply relaxes me. Since I was a kid, I've always preferred the archer character; arrows were a lot cooler than swords. When I was 10, I joined the archery team and I fell in love with the game. Since then, whenever I am stressed, I shoot a few sets and it clears my mind and relaxes me. This game also taught me a few lessons; aiming for the "X" not just 10, patience and perseverance. And till now, "A perfect set" is one of my favorite things to hear.

2. Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

I am fascinated by the electrical engineering and computer science program at MIT. This program seems to be one of the only programs in the world that understands that there shouldn't be a boundary between electrical engineering and computer science. I believe that without this boundary, computer technology can advance at a much higher rate than it is currently advancing. Since I was young, I always wanted to be an inventor, creating robots and different machines. EECS would allow me to do just that, and thanks to MIT's UROP, I can easily work on research while doing my undergraduate degree.

Or

I am extremely interested in MIT's EECS program as it offers a base in both computer science and electrical engineering which would satisfy my desire to study both these fields. I have always been extremely interested in computers and robotics with a real desire to further my knowledge and understanding.

However, this isn't the only reason why I want to go to MIT. I've always wanted to do research before I graduate, and MIT's UROP is the best place for me. The fact that MIT allows undergraduates to do research before getting any degree amazed me and increased my desire to go there.

Ok DON'T EVER SAY "I'm a violent person" and help with my yale essay i'm frescking out

i said "i am not a violent person"

Oh i'm sorry ir rushed out like that but i'm back and there are some minor errors

"Since I was 10,I've been in love with the game of archery"

and "the other characters because they had the advantage of killing their opponent over a distance"

Thanks a lot, but which essay is better .. the first one or the second one ..

For the first one i like the first answer and for the second question I like the second

thanks a lot :)

I would maybe combine the first two like so:

"A perfect set" is the best thing you can hear on the archery range. Since I was 10, I've fallen in love with the game of archery. As a kid, I had always preferred archer characters; the arrows of Robin Hood and Legolas always intrigued me more than swords. As I started to play archery, I became more fascinated by the game. When I draw the arrow, my whole body is tensed and I am fully focused on the X. As I release the arrow, all my muscles loosen up and for a split-second, I am completely relaxed and can forget about all my problems.

Thanks a lot.. that's a really good idea :)

Hey...
for the first essay , i would go with the first 1... its beautfully written and even with the limited word count, expresses to the reader how passionate you are about archery and how it makes you feel.

For the second one.... i would go with the first 1... i myself am applying to ECE program in different universities... and find whatever you have spoken about the MIT's programs... makes you stand out as an applicant who knows what one wants to do and knows exactly why MIT is the place for her..

They love to see that confidence.!! :-)
Best of Luck!