Bakery and recipes - WASHU SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY

Here is the prompt: Tell us about something that really sparks your intellectual interest and curiosity and compels you to explore more. It could be an idea, book, project, cultural activity, work of art, start-up, music, movie, research, innovation, question, or other pursuits. Min is 250, max is 500

My main concern is that I am applying for an art major, and I was thinking of writing this essay about something similar to art, like baking. However, many people told me to write about an art inspiration and how I am driven to draw, but my Common App is already filled with topics about art. So, should I write about baking to be more divergent or about art? Below is my essay on baking but I'm not sure if it answers the prompt.

my power of creating something original

The moment I walk into a bakery, I could smell the aroma of the fresh-baked pastries. I was so drawn towards the chocolate oozing out of the croissant with the sprinkles of coarse salt gently resting on top. My face pressed firmly against the glass panel because the fresh smell of the pastry was irresistible. I watched the powdered sugar fade away as the steam from the croissant rose above it. The perfect square shape of the croissant was beautiful, and I was so inspired to bake my own.

I researched and researched for the perfect croissant recipe, but it was nowhere to be found. I instead took the basics of a croissant and created an original recipe. I wanted the shape of the croissant to mimic hot chocolate because the holidays were just around the corner. Crispy, buttery layers of croissant were to be shaped like a donut, so once it puffs up, the pastry will look like a mug. To fill the "mug", I will melt both dark chocolate and heavy cream to produce a silky smooth ganache. Once bitten into the pastry, the chocolate will flow like how hot chocolate warms us internally. To add a finishing touch, I made peppermint infused marshmallows from a recipe I created, using peppermint extract I made six months ago. These marshmallows will float on top of the ganache and I would never have to worry about it melting. My dessert turned out exactly how I had imagined, and I was in awe of such a masterpiece. Not only did it taste absolutely amazing and reminiscent of Christmas, I have also just invented a work of art. Baking has manifested into my daily life, and I have never stopped unleashing my power of creating something original.

Hello!

Your essay does have a nice style, and you did paint the scene in the first paragraph very well, but the biggest issue you should fix is the fact that, despite talking about an idea which captivates you, you don't develop on the reason why "baking has manifested into [your] daily life" (instead, you use your essay to describe a croissant recipe). Why not writing a longer text and also explaining why was the dessert "a work of art"? This way, you would be able to show the reader you reflection about the meaning of Art - which would portray your maturity. After all, you still got many words left!

BTW, mind your grammar:

I - "will would flow like how hot [I couldn't understand the meaning of this expression]"
II - will would float
III - "turned out to be"
IV - "Christmas, I have also just invented a work of art" - here, you must write a phrase starting with "but it was also..." or something similar

So... I suggest you review your grammar as well.

Anyway, I hope I was of any help. Should you write this essay again, post it here :)

Bye!

Hannah, I have had students who did not listen to me when I advised them to not keep writing about a singular topic for each common app essay they were responding to. You see, the common app essay was created with the purpose of getting to know the student based on various levels of life experience, academic interests, hobbies, skills, and any other possible topic that will help the reviewer get to know the well-rounded person that the applicant is. As such, it is important that you do not beat the topic of "art" to death by discussing it in every common app prompt. If you keep writing about art, then the reviewer will not get to know you beyond that interest, which will result in a weak application consideration for yourself. Life isn't just about art and your responses to the common app prompts should reflect that diversity in experience and interests. When you focus only on one topic throughout the prompt presentations, the admission committee tends to believe that you are not a good fit for the university, due to the lack of intellectual and social maturity on your part (as implied by the singular focus on a topic throughout the prompt discussions) which could then lead to the rejection of your application.

Always change up the topic from art to a life experience, a non- art related hobby, an interest that diverges from art (baking not being one of them based on what you have written above). It could be about a sport, an interest in a specific television program/movie/book series, a personal cause that has led to some volunteering on your part, or anything else of a similar design to my aforementioned descriptions. Pick an activity that you pursue in addition to art for this discussion. Your baking essay doesn't really show a keen interest in this activity and, you still unconsciously connected the discussion to art. So I do not think this essay will work toward your benefit once the reviewer reads it.

The Anecdote at the beginning is great.
But you don't have to include art in this essay. Write about baking on itself, how it moves you and why.
You need to show the admissions officer sdifferent aspects about what defines you as a person. that's why they have different essays.