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"I have balanced these values" - FSU Undergraduate Admission Essay



meltibbs 1 / 2  
Dec 7, 2008   #1
Topic:
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guide philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.


Response:
Values are what shape a person. They are ones standards and moral principles. They are a reflection of each and every person. My life is guided by many values, all of which are reflected constantly in my life. "Vires" and "Mores" are two Latin concepts that strongly indicate my values.

Vires alludes the multiple strengths one may have, such as moral and intellectual. I believe that moral strength is a very important quality to poses. A lot can be said about a person from their morals and values. I personally have faith that I will not waver and will stick to my morals in both undemanding and in difficult situations. Intellectual strength is also a necessary value to have. My grandmother once told me that "knowledge is the key to life." One needs knowledge every day to negotiate their way through situations. Strength is obtained everyday through life lessons and education.

Out of the several different meanings of Mores, the most prevalent in my life is the concept of character. This is the greatest thing that my high school experience has given to me. When I first walked into Martin County High School, I was dreadfully shy and preferred to just blend into the crowd. Throughout my years at Martin County though, I began to join clubs and come out of my shell socially. I have developed character throughout my high school years. I am now more of an individual than ever with high moral and ethical strength. I have developed a new confidence in myself that shines through in all that I do.

Values are what define a person. The Latin words "Vires, Artes, Mores" stands for the values that Florida State University holds. I believe that I have balanced these values within my life and would like for Florida State University to help me to further strengthen these values.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 7, 2008   #2
I personally have faith that I will not waver in my convictions, and that I will stick to my morals even in difficult situations.

Values are what define a person. The Latin words "Vires, Artes, Mores" stands for the values that Florida State University holds. I believe that I have balanced these values within my life, and I hope to strengthen them even more as a student at Florida State University.
volleyball09 11 / 12  
Dec 7, 2008   #3
i think you wrote a pretty good essay.

the only thing i would change is: "...I was dreadfully shy and preferred to simply blend into the crowd"
alpal 3 / 5  
Dec 7, 2008   #4
The only thing that sticks out to me is the first sentence in the last paragraph- "Values are what define a person" is very similar to your first sentence- "Values are what shape a person."

You might want to change that sentence or at least the wording. "A person is defined by their values" could work.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 8, 2008   #5
THESE ARE GREAT PEER REVIEWS!! Thank you all for contributing so sincerely to other people's processes. You are all great!


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