BAND/ NATIONAL HONOR SOCIETY; How I can contribute diversity

Describe how you can contribute to the diversity of the University.

My participation in band, advanced placement classes, and National Honor Society could lead one to believe that I am a stereotypical band nerd. This, however, does not paint a complete picture of me. This perception of me is incomplete because my interests and hobbies are much more widespread. For example, although I have not participated in sports in high school, I do lift weight at home and hope to one day participate in powerlifting competitions, no matter the tier. I have a wide variety of friends, from jocks to nerds and rednecks to skaters, and believe it important to get along with all walks of life. I believe this variety in interests and relationships has made me a better, more cultured person that would bring diversity to the University of *******.

Thanks in advance!

Far too short. Lifting weights and having a variety of friends does not allow you to bring diversity to the university. What is unique to just you?

Hmm.. hell if I know. I'm a white middle class male, haha. I honestly don't believe I can much diversity.
You don't think this shows at least a little variety? Many thanks for the input though.

this is not okay.what do you mean by rednecks? you never answered the question.
I think you should start all over

Expand more on your 'variety in interested and relationships'. I get what you were aiming for but try to be more specific and clarify how this would add to the university.