I'm writing an essay for my English class,,,, I want you help me correcting and fixing my mistakes please...I need it as fast as you can guys,,,,,!! i'm waiting for your help :)
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All About Me
It took me 18 years old to create who I am today and to discover and know the world around me.
I was born in Chicago,IL in199I, but raised in Palestine.I grew up in a wonderful lovely family that contains my mother, two elder sister and three younger brothers. My father wasn't living with us, because he is busy with his job. He is a businessmen; therefore, we were seeing him twice a year. He was coming over to visit us in Palestine every single winter break and we were visiting him in summer time.That continued to happen until summer 2007.We decided to stay in the USA next to my father.Therefore I entered William Howard Taft High School as junior student and graduated after two years. Then I entered Wright College to have my Associate degree and transfer to an university. I'm planing to transfer to the University of Chicago to take my Bachelor degree in Biochemistry.
I'm a kind of person who has a big self-confident which make my life harder sometimes especially when i want to get in contact with someone and put me in a very bad situation with others because most of them misunderstood my big confidence that i grew up at .
My ambition in life is getting my high eduction and enter a medical school and become a heart surgery doctor. Therefore,I need to study as hard as i can and to be more mature.
I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot stop here. I need to move on in order to reach my goals. My success in the future lies in my own hands.
It took me 18 years old to create who I am today and to discover and know the world around me.
I was born in Chicago,IL in199I, but raised in Palestine.I grew up inI am from a wonderful lovely family, that containsconsisting ofmy mother, two elder sister and three younger brothersthree daughters, three sons and my mother . My father wasn't living with us, because he is busy with his jobMy father does not live with us because of his busy job . He is a businessmen, so we see him only twice a year. He used to comeover to visit us in Palestine every single winter break and we visited him in the summer time . That continued to happen until summer 2007.However, in 2007, we decided to staylive with my father in the USA .Therefore I enteredattended William Howard Taft High School to study my junior studentyearand graduated after two years . ThenLater, I enteredattended Wright College to have my Associate degree and transfer to an university . Then I'm planing to transfer to the University of Chicago to take my, where I can earn a Bachelor degree in Biochemistry.
I'm the type of people that has a big self-confidence which make my life harder, sometimes, especially when I want to get in touch with othersand put me in a very bad situation with others because most of them misunderstood my big confidence that i grew up at .
My ambition in life is to get my Master degree or PhD from a medical school and become a heart surgeon . Therefore,I need to study as hard as I can and to be more mature.
I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot give up now . I need to move on in order to reach my goals. My success in the future lies on my own hands.
I hope that helped you a little in grammar. Overall, your writing is great.. you just need to read more to learn how to orgnize your ideas and how to write better. English is not my first language, and reading has been the best way to improve my language. It helps also with learning more vocabulary... any ways, I hope that you like those changes that I made.
Good Luck:-)
thank you so much ... I appreciate your help...and I'll try to work on your advice
thanks again :)
Salah, it's so nice of you to make al these great corrections! Check out the EF_Contributor page.
I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot stop here. I need to move on in order to reach my goals. My future success in the future lies in my own hands.
