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Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?
As I walk into that world, a friendly aura starts to welcome its owner. It is not just a place, it is the landscape of my feeling, the photo of my memory, the motivation to moving forward for the sake of my future. It is me. All of us needs a place like that for themselves to fall back to after facing a tough day, where they can be their true selves and show the most of their abilities. That place I feel like being a part of would be my room.
My personal space may not as interesting as it should be but it has become a part of my life that I can never go on without. At first, it is nothing but a normal teenager's room with a messy working table that is full of notes, textbooks, draft papers along with a computer. At the corner of the room, lying there a comfortable bed which is willing to embrace its owner any time of the day. In addition, the part that I like the most in this chamber is the window. Such simple thing always brings me peace and inspiration especially when those sunlight comes to light up this girl's heart. Just like what a normal bedroom should be, it is not only my workplace but also the only place I can concentrate on my own inner world.
Personally, this room is more meaningful to me more than anywhere else, not only it helps me escape from the noisy world but also gives me the courage to grow up and motivation for creativity. Everytime I look at my chamber, I cannot see it as a room but more like a nest, a diary that records all the emotion and memory. From my happiness when being successful, my upset when experiencing failure to my passion with music or even my persistence when studying, nowhere else has ever witnessed those emotion of mine more like this place. Only when being alone can I be my true self, can I put down the calm and smiling mask to show all the real feeling. This room is the only place that can really creates that environment for me to do so. In addition, while enjoying my time in this lovely place, I usually come up with many interesting ideas such as backpacking around Europe or opening a cafe. It was one time in the spring when I was working on my academic plan that an urge to explore Europe started to appear in my head. Grabbing the computer, I immediately contacted my best friend about the idea and spent hours planning for the best trip in our lives. If it was not in this room, I would never have such interesting ideas like that. The room might be not special, but it is so familiar to me that it unintentionally creates a perfect atmostphere for my concentration with working. Though the library is such a great place, I can devote all the time and energy to study in my chamber. Being distracted by no one, all by myself alone, there is nowhere else can be more suitable for me to create my best works than this room. I don't know how other people find their inspiration, but mine only comes out when I am perfectly content in my room. This personal space inspires my creativity more than anywhere else, not only in my study but also in every artwork I create. My room is also the place that raises me up, develops my thinking and teaches me how to be a real adult. Such place has encouraged a dependent child to grow to a mature teenager who have a better control of her life, just by its easeful atmosphere. Thanks to that, I can have the confidence to study abroad at a community college in California. Looking back again, I can hardly imagine the person I would become without the help of this room, the only place that has given me the motivation to improve my life.
In many aspects, this room is my savior as well as a friend that let me show my real feeling with, creates a perfect environment for me to think, to grow up, and even provides the motivation for my creativity. Even if it is just an empty room, leave me there, I will still paint my soul with this wonderful atmosphere.
Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?
As I walk into that world, a friendly aura starts to welcome its owner. It is not just a place, it is the landscape of my feeling, the photo of my memory, the motivation to moving forward for the sake of my future. It is me. All of us needs a place like that for themselves to fall back to after facing a tough day, where they can be their true selves and show the most of their abilities. That place I feel like being a part of would be my room.
My personal space may not as interesting as it should be but it has become a part of my life that I can never go on without. At first, it is nothing but a normal teenager's room with a messy working table that is full of notes, textbooks, draft papers along with a computer. At the corner of the room, lying there a comfortable bed which is willing to embrace its owner any time of the day. In addition, the part that I like the most in this chamber is the window. Such simple thing always brings me peace and inspiration especially when those sunlight comes to light up this girl's heart. Just like what a normal bedroom should be, it is not only my workplace but also the only place I can concentrate on my own inner world.
Personally, this room is more meaningful to me more than anywhere else, not only it helps me escape from the noisy world but also gives me the courage to grow up and motivation for creativity. Everytime I look at my chamber, I cannot see it as a room but more like a nest, a diary that records all the emotion and memory. From my happiness when being successful, my upset when experiencing failure to my passion with music or even my persistence when studying, nowhere else has ever witnessed those emotion of mine more like this place. Only when being alone can I be my true self, can I put down the calm and smiling mask to show all the real feeling. This room is the only place that can really creates that environment for me to do so. In addition, while enjoying my time in this lovely place, I usually come up with many interesting ideas such as backpacking around Europe or opening a cafe. It was one time in the spring when I was working on my academic plan that an urge to explore Europe started to appear in my head. Grabbing the computer, I immediately contacted my best friend about the idea and spent hours planning for the best trip in our lives. If it was not in this room, I would never have such interesting ideas like that. The room might be not special, but it is so familiar to me that it unintentionally creates a perfect atmostphere for my concentration with working. Though the library is such a great place, I can devote all the time and energy to study in my chamber. Being distracted by no one, all by myself alone, there is nowhere else can be more suitable for me to create my best works than this room. I don't know how other people find their inspiration, but mine only comes out when I am perfectly content in my room. This personal space inspires my creativity more than anywhere else, not only in my study but also in every artwork I create. My room is also the place that raises me up, develops my thinking and teaches me how to be a real adult. Such place has encouraged a dependent child to grow to a mature teenager who have a better control of her life, just by its easeful atmosphere. Thanks to that, I can have the confidence to study abroad at a community college in California. Looking back again, I can hardly imagine the person I would become without the help of this room, the only place that has given me the motivation to improve my life.
In many aspects, this room is my savior as well as a friend that let me show my real feeling with, creates a perfect environment for me to think, to grow up, and even provides the motivation for my creativity. Even if it is just an empty room, leave me there, I will still paint my soul with this wonderful atmosphere.
