My Bedroom - Common App Essay: A Meaningful Environment

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Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?

As I walk into that world, a friendly aura starts to welcome its owner. It is not just a place, it is the landscape of my feeling, the photo of my memory, the motivation to moving forward for the sake of my future. It is me. All of us needs a place like that for themselves to fall back to after facing a tough day, where they can be their true selves and show the most of their abilities. That place I feel like being a part of would be my room.

My personal space may not as interesting as it should be but it has become a part of my life that I can never go on without. At first, it is nothing but a normal teenager's room with a messy working table that is full of notes, textbooks, draft papers along with a computer. At the corner of the room, lying there a comfortable bed which is willing to embrace its owner any time of the day. In addition, the part that I like the most in this chamber is the window. Such simple thing always brings me peace and inspiration especially when those sunlight comes to light up this girl's heart. Just like what a normal bedroom should be, it is not only my workplace but also the only place I can concentrate on my own inner world.

Personally, this room is more meaningful to me more than anywhere else, not only it helps me escape from the noisy world but also gives me the courage to grow up and motivation for creativity. Everytime I look at my chamber, I cannot see it as a room but more like a nest, a diary that records all the emotion and memory. From my happiness when being successful, my upset when experiencing failure to my passion with music or even my persistence when studying, nowhere else has ever witnessed those emotion of mine more like this place. Only when being alone can I be my true self, can I put down the calm and smiling mask to show all the real feeling. This room is the only place that can really creates that environment for me to do so. In addition, while enjoying my time in this lovely place, I usually come up with many interesting ideas such as backpacking around Europe or opening a cafe. It was one time in the spring when I was working on my academic plan that an urge to explore Europe started to appear in my head. Grabbing the computer, I immediately contacted my best friend about the idea and spent hours planning for the best trip in our lives. If it was not in this room, I would never have such interesting ideas like that. The room might be not special, but it is so familiar to me that it unintentionally creates a perfect atmostphere for my concentration with working. Though the library is such a great place, I can devote all the time and energy to study in my chamber. Being distracted by no one, all by myself alone, there is nowhere else can be more suitable for me to create my best works than this room. I don't know how other people find their inspiration, but mine only comes out when I am perfectly content in my room. This personal space inspires my creativity more than anywhere else, not only in my study but also in every artwork I create. My room is also the place that raises me up, develops my thinking and teaches me how to be a real adult. Such place has encouraged a dependent child to grow to a mature teenager who have a better control of her life, just by its easeful atmosphere. Thanks to that, I can have the confidence to study abroad at a community college in California. Looking back again, I can hardly imagine the person I would become without the help of this room, the only place that has given me the motivation to improve my life.

In many aspects, this room is my savior as well as a friend that let me show my real feeling with, creates a perfect environment for me to think, to grow up, and even provides the motivation for my creativity. Even if it is just an empty room, leave me there, I will still paint my soul with this wonderful atmosphere.

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Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?

All the passengers on the bus stared. No one bothered to help me. No one. I had screwed up that I bumped hard into an old lady and she was swearing harshly despite all my apologies. I was so embarrassed that my mind went blank. "I need to go home. Right now!" The next thing I knew, I was lying on my bed, burying my face in the pillow and letting out all my frustration. I had finally made it to my room, the only place where I can let all of my guards down. Ever since I left Vietnam in 2012 to come to the United States, my room has always been the place where I can find safety and reflect on the lessons of my life whether when I face a challenge or experience a joy in this new country.

Everytime I look at my personal space, I don't see it as a room but more like a nest where I spend most of my free time. It was not until I moved to the U.S. that I could have my own room and be able to leave all of the world's rules at the door, revealing my true self - an easygoing, emotional artist - that people rarely see. It can be said that taking a glance at this room will enable you to have a rough idea of who I am. Let's start with my brown wooden wobbly chair, it never fails to be the perfect place for me to concentrate on my homework and my drawings. Next to my chair, the messy table full of notes, textbooks and draft papers, holds all of my important ideas and offers a convenient place to study. At the other corner of the room, the queen-sized bed with its dark blue blanket and my favorite books like "Harry Potter" and Kaori's "Twinkle Twinkle" offers me peace and paints my soul every night. There is nowhere else that has given me the feeling of perfect contentedness, calm and peace, like this precious room of mine.

My room may not be a person, but it is more than a friend - a silent partner who always shows empathy. I succeed, it shares the joy. I fail, it stays silent, giving me time to think and grow up. When I get A on my exams, the gray wall suddenly brightens, sunshine lights the whole room and the floor widens for me to perform my celebration dance. When I fail an interview, it dims stretching out its motherly arms, comforting me with ease and calm. This little "home" has raised me from a dependent child to a mature adult who has better control of her life. It loves me like a friend, embraces me like a mother, inspires me like a piece of art and claims a rightful place in my heart. My room is not just a place to stay; it is everything to me.

Many people cannot understand how an introvert like me can spend hours alone behind a closed door and still feel alive. But everyone, if they are lucky, finds their own place. To my father, it is his gray 2003 Camry that he drives endlessly throughout Ho Chi Minh City. Or my friend who lives on her surf board chasing the thrill of riding the perfect waves in Florida. When I stay in my room, I feel as if all of my energy is being recharged. Worry is no where to be found, inspiration begins to fill my mind and motivation starts to push me forward so that I can confidently and happily head to the future every day in this place, 8,000 miles from home. It has become a major part of me that I can hardly imagine the person I would become without.

Back to the day when I was cursed out and left to fend for myself as others watch on, I took a moment to escape before continuing to learn life's lesson. Picking up one of my father's old, edge-worn books, I started a new adventure in my own world while taking in the warm sunshine that streams through the little window. My bad days just fell into oblivion and I felt reborn once again, in this unique room I called mine.