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"The beeping of an EKG machine" - Why Emory



Anonymoussenior 17 / 124  
Jan 31, 2011   #1
Prompt: Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?

The incessant beeping of an EKG machine was one of my first memories at Emory. That high pitch beeping was the symbol that my step father was alive; it was my hope that he would get better, but it was also the start of my Emory College dreams. For months, I became acquainted with the bustling students on campus. I would envision myself amongst the student body, rushing to freshman seminar about Doctors and Doctoring or Intro to Psychology. I saw myself sitting in an auditorium, sufficiently enthralled with what my professor had to say. I dreamed that I was as a volunteer EMT- I, writing a quirky limerick during Dooley's Week.I don't know that these sentences fit together I could see myself as an Emory student.

Emory embodied everything I wanted in a college. With small class sizes and educational advisors, my Emory education would be tailored to an environment in which I could thrive. At Emory, I would have access to renowned educators, and a plethora of research opportunities. Emory would provide me with a specialized education that could not be experienced elsewhere. Here, I would find myself pursuing my academic goals in psychology, while studying abroad and still making it home for Sunday night dinner. With numerous clubs, organizations and programs to choose from, there is always something new and exhilarating to learn on campus. All those years ago, Emory became my other twin, linked forever by common myinterests and future dreams. From the age of twelve, Emory College became my future.

Attatched is my first poem to Lord Dooley:
Sincerely Lord Dooley of Misrule
Please grant me admission to your school.
Rapt by your traditions
I ask your chief permission,
To be part of the acceptance pool.

I need a way to better link the poem to the rest of the essay any help will be appreciated. I will read back. I also need to cut out a little bit to fit within the word count so any suggestions of unnecessary parts that can be removed will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading.

Chocolette /  
Jan 31, 2011   #2
Maybe instead of Doctors and Doctoring, doctors or doctoring. Is the poem at the bottom the limerick you wrote? If not, I'm sure you could connect the poem to limerick somehow. Like a by the way type of thing.
OP Anonymoussenior 17 / 124  
Jan 31, 2011   #3
Yes I wrote the Limerick kinda as a joke but then decided that I might as well include it in my essay somehow since it was somewhat relevant to the topic. The Doctors and Doctoring part is a name of a freshman seminar at Emory so I can't change the name. Thanks for reading my essay.
amberisdead 9 / 24  
Feb 1, 2011   #4
I can't actually find any fault with ur essay.. seriously haha
I really like ur flow.

I began to picture myself as a volunteer EMT- I, writing a quirky limerick on Dooley's day.

i think this part is redundant though

oh and i really think the limerick is a little silly and overused(sorry to be harsh), because i have seen many people talked about dooley's week already. It's okay to mention it but to write a whole poem on it seems too overly done.

BTW i'm applying to Emory as well , do u mind taking a look at mine?


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