This is my first time posting on here, not really sure how it works but I have begun to write the essay and now I am lost. Any advice?
Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University? (Maximum: 250 words)
Ever since I began high school as a short, geeky freshman, I could not wait for college. I spent endless hours researching colleges until one day, I stumbled upon Syracuse, and I found it was the perfect school for me. I have a passion for history, so I proceeded to research all about Syracuse's history major. Scrolling through the PDF of courses offered on my brightly lit computer screen, classes such as Modern American Presidency, Modern American Political Thought, and Women in America: Civil War to the Present jumped out at me. I love history and learning about the past, but I am also very interested in learning about the present, as I have a love for politics. Syracuse's history program is perfect for me in that it gives me the perfect education for my next step in life after college: law school. ... I do not know what else to write after this.
Thanks!
Edit:
I actually just added this: Additionally, Syracuse's newspaper, The Daily Orange, is regarded as one of the best college newspapers in the country. Being Editor-in-Chief of my high school newspaper, I love writing articles and designing pages, and would love to have the privilege of working for one of the best college newspapers in the country.
Any feedback would be very appreciated :)
good start put you should, in my opinion, focus more on the daily orange as it would show them how much you are invested in their college. Remember adcoms also want to know why you would make their community better. From that point you should talk about how you would try to join the daily orange and contribute to it. Also talk about any experience you have with journalism. try to show them mpre about how much you are interested in the colleges and why they should accept YOU.
again good job. NO English mistakes to correct except prioritize the daily orange.
Hey, I'm also applying to Syracuse University!
Your answer is fine, but it may sound cliche, as many students also research the schools they're applying to online. Did you visit SU? What is it about SU that is truly unique amongst other colleges?
Also this sentence needs some revision:
"Syracuse's history program is perfect for me in that it gives me the perfect education for my next step in life after college: law school. "
The word "perfect" is used twice. And, what makes the program "perfect" exactly?
I also agree with @amounenaitlho. Let Syracuse University know that you are an avid reader of their newspaper. Maybe even include your favorite article and why you liked it so much.
If you get the chance, could you also read my SU application answers? Thank you!
NB, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay.
- Ever since I began high school as a short,I started in the academe as a geeky freshman,
- and from then on I could not wait for college.
- I spent endless hours researching colleges until one day, I stumbled uponI found Syracuse,
- and I found it was the perfect school forthe right institution for a person like me.
- so I proceeded to research all about Syracuse's history major.
- I love history and learning about the past, but I am also very interested inas well as learning about the present,
- as I have a love forsuch as politics.
- Syracuse's history program is the perfect fit for me
- in that it gives me the perfectand the institution provides education for my next step
- in life after college: law school my ultimate goal in the academe and hopefully my professional career.
NB, the above are my corrections and remarks, I hope it helped.
Thank you everyone. I actually fixed the essay up a bit, if you guys could comment suggestions about this, that'd be great. I also added the second supplement. I wasn't sure how I could edit my original post (sorry new to this site)
Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University? (Maximum: 250 words)
I started high school a geeky freshman, and from then on I could not wait for college. I spent endless hours researching colleges until one day, I found Syracuse, the perfect institution for a person like me. I have a passion for history, so I proceeded to research all about Syracuse's history major. Scrolling through the PDF of courses offered on my brightly lit computer screen, classes such as Modern American Presidency, Modern American Political Thought, and Women in America: Civil War to the Present jumped out at me. I love history and learning about the past, but I am also very interested in learning about what is happening in the present, such as politics. Additionally, Syracuse's newspaper, The Daily Orange, is regarded as one of the best college newspapers in the country. Being Editor-in-Chief of my high school newspaper, I enjoy writing articles and designing pages for our student run newspaper, just like Syracuse's. I have a passion for informing my peers, staff and administrators of things going on around them, as I have shown through my involvement with my high school's newspaper, The Eagle. The Daily Orange reports on a variety of topics ranging from Syracuse's sports teams to news stories about things happening around campus. I would love to have the privilege of coming to Syracuse and working for one of the best college newspapers in the country.
Who is the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University can help you achieve this? (Maximum: 250 words)
I hope to be someone that stands up for those who are too afraid to speak up for themselves. My school newspaper, The Eagle, has set a goal to educate our students on issues they may not have been thinking about before they read about them in our newspaper. One of my favorite issues by our paper was the stress, depression, body image, and students with divorced parents issue published during the 2014-2015 school year which focused on many things students typically hear about, but probably would have never known to what extent others around them were affected by these issues (we interviewed and surveyed many students and used their responses in the paper). We shed light on sensitive topics so that students who are too afraid to speak up on their own can be heard through our newspaper. We also published a police misconduct and racial stereotyping in America issue which shed a new light on the issue many students never thought about as many students in our school have (thankfully) never experienced police misconduct. We did not try to choose a side in the citizens vs police debate, we simply brought all of the facts we collected on both parties and shared them with our students to make them more informed. Informing students about situations like these has helped to make my high school a more tolerant environment.
