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Please discuss your interest in Bentley and the aspects of our community that will help you reach your academic and personal goals. (1000 characters - I've got 5 left)
One of the prime factors that compelled me to apply to Bentley University is its personal approach to students. As I live in Hanoi, thousands of miles from Waltham, I was thrilled when Bentley offered me what I thought was an impossible - an interview with an admission officer. What I derive from this fact is that the school attaches great attention to individuals and is willing to spend more time and efforts to get to know each applicant.
The university composes of highly competitive, resolute students who are willing to take the opportunity of excellent education the school provides. Bentley's graduates are, thus, intelligent, well-rounded, inquiring minds, who benefited all advantages of an advanced business curriculum, exceptional liberal arts schooling and the emphasis on technical skills. Moreover, Bentley's heterogeneous community would help me gain knowledge about different cultures and perspectives - an essential if I want to use my business skills in a global context.
Please discuss your interest in Bentley and the aspects of our community that will help you reach your academic and personal goals. (1000 characters - I've got 5 left)
One of the prime factors that compelled me to apply to Bentley University is its personal approach to students. As I live in Hanoi, thousands of miles from Waltham, I was thrilled when Bentley offered me what I thought was an impossible - an interview with an admission officer. What I derive from this fact is that the school attaches great attention to individuals and is willing to spend more time and efforts to get to know each applicant.
The university composes of highly competitive, resolute students who are willing to take the opportunity of excellent education the school provides. Bentley's graduates are, thus, intelligent, well-rounded, inquiring minds, who benefited all advantages of an advanced business curriculum, exceptional liberal arts schooling and the emphasis on technical skills. Moreover, Bentley's heterogeneous community would help me gain knowledge about different cultures and perspectives - an essential if I want to use my business skills in a global context.