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"I did my best" - Describe a time that you were late for and event:



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Oct 3, 2018   #1

Describe a time that you were late for and event:


To begin with, I have to admit that I'm an oblivious kind of persion, so tardiness is probably quite a problem for me. But for some oppointment or event that I consider really important, I would mostly cautiously, without any careless. But I'd be lying if I told you that I never made such a mistake. so today I'd to tell you a time that I was late for and important event.

As a mater of fact, there was the time that I have chance to go on the stage at a music show of my university. I remember really pumped up for such a oppotunity and the show is pretty famous as well. So I trained alot and couting down the day to go on the stage. And the day finally came, acording to the the schedule, I suppose to reach the stage at least 30 minutes for press rehearsal before the show started at 7 p.m. So I left home at 6 after getting ready. As you probably guess, somethings would happen in the road. My motobike have a problem and suddenly stop at a deserted road. My anxiety was increasing enormously cause there was no motobike repair shop around. So I had no choice but to walk my motobike to find one. you no thinking about when I appear as an iresponsible latecomer in the eyes of other anf the fear that I coudn't go on the stage. It was really frustrated me. But finally, I reached there at 7h30 and there they were all waiting for me. Although It was not my turn yet but I wasn't able to perform without attend the press- rehearsal. But after a while I try to persuade the chief of the show, I was given the precious chance. and I know there was no excuse better than a perfect performant. And I did, I actually give it my best shot. Although everythings worked out well, I obviously much more careful when it come to a similar tituation afterward.

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Oct 4, 2018   #2
@khuong97dx2 between the tense usage problem, lack of connecting word usage, and vocabulary mistakes which all led up to an imperfectly written essay, I would have to say that this was an insightful presentation just the same. While I believe that you could have applied yourself more towards researching the method of sentence structure and development, I can also understand that you are an ESL writer so I should not expect you to be conscious of the mistakes that you made. However, had you written this essay in a document program, the mistakes in spelling, vocabulary usage, and tense usage would have been immediately caught by the system which would have then advised you to correct the errors in order to create a better written presentation.

Please continue to practice your English writing skills with a focus on learning how to use the proper tense presentation, learn more English vocabulary and use the words in the proper manner (performance not performant), be more careful of your writing patterns and please, proof read your essay before you submit it for review.

As for the content, you should have given an equal focus to what happened when you got to the venue. Specifically how you convinced the chief of the show to allow you to perform even though you missed the press rehearsal (Are you sure you did not mean Dress Rehearsal? That is the correct term for the final rehearsal before the live show). That would be the highlight of the "late for an event" part of the narrative.


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