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Prompt: In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.
Out of all of the members of the Class of 2012 in my high school, I can safely say that I have experienced the best summer vacations. Did I experience a private getaway with daytime room service and gourmet cuisine by demand? I sure didn't, but during the past three summers, if you were a hospital patient at St. Petersburg General Hospital, I made it my mantra that you received all of these fine benefits! As I get an opportunity to share my summertime Junior Volunteering experience, I curiously reminisce how just three summers ago, I was a petrified "needle-phobic" who couldn't go ten feet in front of a doctor's office without experiencing full-body sweating and what felt like heart palpitations! Three summers later, I am leading a tour for new Junior Volunteers around my beloved summertime sanctuary, giving these bright and talented individuals proper instructions on how to serve patients their breakfast trays and how to gently knock on a closed door before entering a patient's room. These menial tasks may seem small compared to the size of a General Hospital, however from my own experience as a young shoulder surgery patient, I know firsthand that patients love being taken care of, no matter what their internal or external dilemmas may be, in a loved and timely fashion.
Prompt: In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.
Out of all of the members of the Class of 2012 in my high school, I can safely say that I have experienced the best summer vacations. Did I experience a private getaway with daytime room service and gourmet cuisine by demand? I sure didn't, but during the past three summers, if you were a hospital patient at St. Petersburg General Hospital, I made it my mantra that you received all of these fine benefits! As I get an opportunity to share my summertime Junior Volunteering experience, I curiously reminisce how just three summers ago, I was a petrified "needle-phobic" who couldn't go ten feet in front of a doctor's office without experiencing full-body sweating and what felt like heart palpitations! Three summers later, I am leading a tour for new Junior Volunteers around my beloved summertime sanctuary, giving these bright and talented individuals proper instructions on how to serve patients their breakfast trays and how to gently knock on a closed door before entering a patient's room. These menial tasks may seem small compared to the size of a General Hospital, however from my own experience as a young shoulder surgery patient, I know firsthand that patients love being taken care of, no matter what their internal or external dilemmas may be, in a loved and timely fashion.
