Essay: The personal statements are a very important part of your application. They assist the university in knowing you as an individual, independent of test scores and other objective data. We ask that you respond to two of the topics below. Your personal statement should be no longer than a total of 500 words or 7000 characters for both statements combined. The best personal statements are not necessarily the longest ones.
1.If there has been some obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.
2.How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?
3.Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
4.What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?
#'s 2 and 4 I chose
1. I have lived on this planet called Earth for Eighteen years now and throughout my life I have discovered one thing, that you are the key to your own life. The funny thing is that your life is influenced by so many factors, good and bad. We are influenced from the fashion trends that are the "new" right now all the way to the type of food that we eat from our culture and heritage. My life is filled with experiences good and bad that have defined me. I am going to quote an old English poet on my belief of your family; "Blood is thicker than water. It is what defines us, binds us, and curses us." I will not say that being Hispanic makes family relationships stronger than American families, but I will state that I believe your family is a huge part of your life. I am a Hispanic at heart living the American Dream. I celebrate the Fourth of July and Dia de Los Muertos (Day of the Dead). I have been through what most have not and at the same time everyday things so that makes me, the only way I can explain it, me. I live my life frugal yet adventurous and hope to live life to the fullest. I would rather my grave say that I died having fun, than bedridden feeling miserable. My culture has molded me while America and its luxuries have filled in the cracks. Now it is time to let destiny guide me on my way to tomorrow.
4. I was born for a purpose, still yet unknown exactly, but I believe that it has to do with something in the Medical Field because I love it way too much to do anything else. Certain Characteristics that I believed that have defined me as a worthy choice to the University of Central Florida community would be Respect, Compassion, Determination, Responsibility, and most of all that I Boast in my weaknesses. With these characteristics I only hope to enlighten the community of University of Central Florida. I am absolutely determined to if not increase then keep strong the academic level of the University. With these skills I can show to this prestigious university that having me on their side will only be a benefit. I hope to join many clubs and extra-curricular activities, while still focusing on school, to surround myself with all the opportunities given to me at the University. I want to take the chance of being president of a bunch of clubs or at the least a leadership position to show my strength. Going to this University, I believe will give me an amazing opportunity to start the right path. I want to be so accomplished and successful in the community of the University of Central Florida that the new undergraduates will come to me and ask for my help, which I will do with open arms because I will never let someone down or left alone.
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1. I have lived on this planet called Eartha little awkward for e ighteen years now and if I've learned anything in that time, it's that you are the main key to your own life. The funny thing is that your life is influenced by so many factors, good and bad. We are influenced from the fashion trends that are the "new" right now all the way to the type of food that we eat from our culture and heritage. My life is filled with experiences, good and bad, that have come to define me . I am going to quote an old English poet on my belief of your family; "Blood is thicker than water. It is what defines us, binds us, and curses us." I will not say that being Hispanic makes family relationships stronger than those of American families, but I will state that I believe family is a huge part of life. I am Hispanic at heart, living the American Dream. I celebrate the Fourth of July and Dia de Los Muertos (Day of the Dead). I have been through what most have not and at the same time everyday things so that makes me, the only way I can explain it, me. I live my life frugal yet adventurous and hope to live life to the fullest. I would rather my grave say that I died having fun, than bedridden feeling miserable. My culture has molded me while America and its luxuries have filled in the cracks. Now it is time to let destiny guide me on my way to tomorrow.
The essay is a bit short, and the sentence structure could be played with a bit to make it a little less same-y. Maybe go into something unique about your family and its traditions rather than just talking about Hispanics as a community.
Just some suggestions, good luck!
