Please critique? It's due today :|
Attach an essay of no more than 500 words indicating what most influenced you to apply to The George Washington University (required of all applicants).
The quiet Hispanic family prayed as the volunteers began to fervently serve food to the hundred or so homeless people seated in the Shared Bread food kitchen's dining area. Whereas others tended to greedily take a plate from my hands before I even set it down, this family always kindly thanked me for the food and passed the first plates I set down to their grandmothers and children first. In a situation where it would be understandable for them to think of only themselves, they instead showed kindness and respect that humbled me.
Although I could not continue my service at Shared Bread due to its distant location, the volunteering opportunity helped me to witness how the less fortunate lived in reality. Hence, the volunteering opportunities that colleges offered became an important factor in weighing which school would best fit me. Coming upon the George Washington University's website after reading about the school in one of the thick college guidebooks at Borders, I became increasingly interested in its Neighbors Project, which would help me to interact with any of the nonprofit organizations that is associated with the school. Also, GWU's Freshman Day of Service is the only such event I have heard of that is hosted by a university and its focus to honor veterans holds a special meaning for me because of my late grandfather's service in the Korean War being recognized with a burial in the Seoul National Cemetery. For me, GWU's involvement with its city conveys its well-roundedness clearly.
However, I am not merely impressed by the school's notable activities students can partake in to get involved with the community; the school's academic opportunities intrigues me equally, if not more. As an eager business prospective student, how could I ignore the recognitions the George Washington School of Business boast? Ranking as 38th on the 2009 list of U.S. New & World Report's America's Best Undergraduate Business Programs, GWSB not only provides students excellent faculty for the intellectual preparation for the future , but also programs and services for hands-on experiences.
Undoubtedly, transitioning from the small world of high school into the real world of college will instill both fears of excitement and apprehension. And for that reason, the First Year Development Program of GWSB will be perfect in extinguishing my anxiety and igniting my passion for business management even further because of the assistance I will receive and the mentors I will meet. The GWSB Paris Study Abroad program as well as the myriad of distinguished speakers who visit, such as the FedEx CEO, Frederick Smith, will only continue to motivate me to becoming a successful businesswoman.
I consider GWU to be the best fit for all of my needs as a humble student who wishes to give back to those in need and as an enthusiastic businesswoman-to-be. I believe that the knowledge I will gain in and out of the university will aid me to become a better person in general.
Thanks in advance!
Attach an essay of no more than 500 words indicating what most influenced you to apply to The George Washington University (required of all applicants).
The quiet Hispanic family prayed as the volunteers began to fervently serve food to the hundred or so homeless people seated in the Shared Bread food kitchen's dining area. Whereas others tended to greedily take a plate from my hands before I even set it down, this family always kindly thanked me for the food and passed the first plates I set down to their grandmothers and children first. In a situation where it would be understandable for them to think of only themselves, they instead showed kindness and respect that humbled me.
Although I could not continue my service at Shared Bread due to its distant location, the volunteering opportunity helped me to witness how the less fortunate lived in reality. Hence, the volunteering opportunities that colleges offered became an important factor in weighing which school would best fit me. Coming upon the George Washington University's website after reading about the school in one of the thick college guidebooks at Borders, I became increasingly interested in its Neighbors Project, which would help me to interact with any of the nonprofit organizations that is associated with the school. Also, GWU's Freshman Day of Service is the only such event I have heard of that is hosted by a university and its focus to honor veterans holds a special meaning for me because of my late grandfather's service in the Korean War being recognized with a burial in the Seoul National Cemetery. For me, GWU's involvement with its city conveys its well-roundedness clearly.
However, I am not merely impressed by the school's notable activities students can partake in to get involved with the community; the school's academic opportunities intrigues me equally, if not more. As an eager business prospective student, how could I ignore the recognitions the George Washington School of Business boast? Ranking as 38th on the 2009 list of U.S. New & World Report's America's Best Undergraduate Business Programs, GWSB not only provides students excellent faculty for the intellectual preparation for the future , but also programs and services for hands-on experiences.
Undoubtedly, transitioning from the small world of high school into the real world of college will instill both fears of excitement and apprehension. And for that reason, the First Year Development Program of GWSB will be perfect in extinguishing my anxiety and igniting my passion for business management even further because of the assistance I will receive and the mentors I will meet. The GWSB Paris Study Abroad program as well as the myriad of distinguished speakers who visit, such as the FedEx CEO, Frederick Smith, will only continue to motivate me to becoming a successful businesswoman.
I consider GWU to be the best fit for all of my needs as a humble student who wishes to give back to those in need and as an enthusiastic businesswoman-to-be. I believe that the knowledge I will gain in and out of the university will aid me to become a better person in general.
Thanks in advance!
