Hi guys, I just fininshed an essay on this prompt:
Caltech students have long been known for their quirky sense of humor and creative pranks and for finding unusual ways to have fun. What is something that you find fun or humorous? (Limit 1000 characters)
The biology teacher calls out my friends name during a partner lab: he needs to go to the attendance office to clear up an absence. He forgot to take his backpack with him - a perfect opportunity for me to strike. I reach into his backpack stealthily, and, making sure that I am not being watched, pull out his TI-83 calculator and decide to cause havoc. I enter a simple but elegant program on my friend's calculator and return it to its original place. So far so good. My friend comes back, notices nothing out of the ordinary, sits down, and resumes his math homework since we are already done with the lab. Only after using the calculator for a few minutes has he realized that it has been tampered with: the numbers are all greater than they should be. Not knowing the exact cause, he frantically presses all the buttons, finally hitting the "on" key, terminating the program. Giving away my involvement in this heinous crime by letting out an involuntary chuckle, I proceed to show him the program that I wrote, assure him that no harm had been done, and we all had a good laugh in the end.
What do you guys think about it? Does the essay answer the prompt and most importantly, do you think it's interesting? Also, my essay has 1100 characters. Any ideas on how reduce the length? Thanks in advance for your help.
Caltech students have long been known for their quirky sense of humor and creative pranks and for finding unusual ways to have fun. What is something that you find fun or humorous? (Limit 1000 characters)
The biology teacher calls out my friends name during a partner lab: he needs to go to the attendance office to clear up an absence. He forgot to take his backpack with him - a perfect opportunity for me to strike. I reach into his backpack stealthily, and, making sure that I am not being watched, pull out his TI-83 calculator and decide to cause havoc. I enter a simple but elegant program on my friend's calculator and return it to its original place. So far so good. My friend comes back, notices nothing out of the ordinary, sits down, and resumes his math homework since we are already done with the lab. Only after using the calculator for a few minutes has he realized that it has been tampered with: the numbers are all greater than they should be. Not knowing the exact cause, he frantically presses all the buttons, finally hitting the "on" key, terminating the program. Giving away my involvement in this heinous crime by letting out an involuntary chuckle, I proceed to show him the program that I wrote, assure him that no harm had been done, and we all had a good laugh in the end.
What do you guys think about it? Does the essay answer the prompt and most importantly, do you think it's interesting? Also, my essay has 1100 characters. Any ideas on how reduce the length? Thanks in advance for your help.