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Caltech Essay Prompt - Interest in math, science, or engineering



Mayada 6 / 74  
Aug 16, 2009   #1
Interest in math, science, or engineering manifests itself in many forms. Caltech professor and Nobel Laureate Richard Feynman (1918-1988) explained, "I'd make a motor, I'd make a gadget that would go off when something passed a photocell, I'd play around with selenium"; he was exploring his interest in science, as he put it, by "piddling around all the time." In a page, more or less, tell the Admissions Committee how you express your interest, curiosity, or excitement about math, science or engineering.

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I usually fall in love with things I consider easy which I find myself good at. This explains how I can be a writer, an artist, or a dancer.

I am fond of drawing, because my hand skillfully creates magic between the pen and paper that compels them to work together and bring out the best of what could be accomplished by these two. I can see myself in whatever I draw, whether it's a girl, a horse, or simply abstract art that is not understood by anyone but me.

I love writing, because I can better express myself on paper as I can rephrase my message a thousand times in my head before I get out my final piece. I can hear myself speak, scream, and whisper in my writings, sometimes all at once.

I cannot live without dancing, because I cannot stop myself from moving collaboratively with the beats of the exciting tunes of music. I can feel myself through observing my moves working and cooperating with sounds and jingles.

However, that is not why I desire to be an engineer or why I care passionately about science. Science was different. Science challenged me, and I was up for it. I fell in love with something that I actually found challenging.

I am fond of math, because a simple unsolved equation invites me to crack it. I can see myself in whatever I solve; I see a person with problems in her life that is ready to be cracked. When it's free-time at school, I tend to ask my teacher for math questions to compete with my friends in solving them.

I love physics, because it provided me with answers that I found illogical in the most logical way. I can hear myself excited and cheerful about discovering a new answer to a question I have always had. I skip my way to class when we have physics when most of my classmates watch me, surprised.

I cannot live without chemistry, because it is subject that deals with mystery and predictions made by scientists who might have been a lot like me in one stage of their lives. I feel myself in chemistry, and I feel that chemistry is my path to success in my life.

I decided to take my relationship with math, physics, and chemistry to the next level by choosing to major in chemical engineering. I fell in love with chemical engineering because I can see, hear, and feel myself a chemical engineer.

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thank you everyone!! Your feedback is very much appreciated.

EF_Simone 2 / 1975  
Aug 16, 2009   #2
However, that is not why I desire to be an engineer or why I care passionately about science.

Your essay is halfway over and you still haven't begun to answer the prompt, which is not why you like math or science but how you express your interest in those subjects.
EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Aug 16, 2009   #3
The second half of your essay doesn't really deal with the "how," either, though it is marginally more relevant. I'd suggest brainstorming answers to the prompt question, and writing a more tightly focused essay that directly addresses it.
Llamapoop123 7 / 433  
Aug 16, 2009   #4
Mayada I read your essay and only after seeing your reply to Liebe did I actually see your attempt at rhetoric. What does this show? It may show that I am just plain dumb or it may show that your valient effort does not spice up your essay whatsoever.

the point of mentioning dancing, writing, and drawing is not to impress the admissions, it's to compare the reasons why I liked these hobbies with why i like science. I liked them bcz they were easy to me, and i liked science bcz it was challenging..

Ok then why the repitition of the stuff you bolded? Why are you comparing them in the first place? That's what I don't understand and possibly the reason that we don't find the first half of your essay to be relevent to the prompt or the essay itself.


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