CAMCORDER; UVA essay - Small funded engineering project

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If you were given funding for a small engineering project, what would you do? (250)

Have you ever experienced an unwonted moment and wish you could deliver the excitement to others but no one would believe you? You would need a firm evidence to prove you just saw a Santa on the sled with his big bag of presents. It is obvious people can't carry camcorder with them all the time, and even if they did, it would be too late to start recording after the amazing has happened. If I were given fund for an engineering project, I would develop a camcorder that can record the images from the past so people would never miss their baby's first step.

The experiences of developing and programming skills I learned would help me to develop a system that would continuously dump older memory and replace the space with incoming new ones. This will allow the camcorder to record live videos nonstop and once the button is pressed, the past couple minutes of memory consisting past images would be sent to designated location. The camera will be available both in small size so it can be attached on glasses or exclusive built in glasses.

Not only preventing people from missing great moments, but the camcorder would also help law enforcement to have substantive evidences. The law enforcements, finally, would be able to see from "eyes" of the witness. The amazing stuff happens anywhere at any time unexpectedly. Only imagine my funded camcorder project will let people enjoy the most of what happen to them.

Have you ever experienced an unwonted moment and wished you could deliver the excitement to others but no one would believe you?
You would need a firm evidence to prove that you just saw a Santa on the sled with his big bag of presents
It is obvious that people can't carry camcorder with them all the time, and even if they did, it would be too late to start recording after the amazing thing has happened

The camera will be available both in small size so it can be attached on glasses or exclusively built in glasses.
Not only preventing people from missing great moments, but the camcorder would also help law enforcementenforcer to have substantive evidences


-- Great introduction!


-- Better include this on the body part, for it still tells about one of the fascinating things your camcorder could do.

Your conclusion is somehow good ; just add a little bit more concluding sentences. But these two are great! :

Thank you so much for modification. I will try my best with better conclusion.